User talk:Sarah.isaacs/sandbox

Alyssa's Lead Section: Critiques 1. I feel its brief and comprehensive and gives a good amount of information. 2. It summarizes and defines most important points. 3. Yes it establishes notability. Only critique I have is that at the ending I would add that the Untold Lives is a book.Jalen Allison (talk) 02:54, 29 March 2018 (UTC) Critique: 1. Yes, the first paragraph can stand alone but may need more substance. 2. It defines what she was known for. I can't find anywhere about prominent controversies which is fine because there probably aren't any then. 3. It could improve her notability by making her sound more important. Megan Boehm (talk) 03:09, 29 March 2018 (UTC) 1. Yes it can stand alone on its own, great overview 2. It gives a nice summary of the main events in her life and what she accomplished. 3. It is notable to the subject of Elizabeth’s life. Only critique I would give is that I would add a little to her educationa background. Sarah.isaacs (talk) 13:32, 29 March 2018 (UTC)

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@Sarah.isaacs, Alyssa.wroblewski, Megan Boehm, and Jalen Allison: Nice work. A few things that could use fixing

You need to copyedit your work. For example, in the lead, you call her book "Untold lives: The first generation of American women psychologist", singular.
You should add links to other Wikipedia articles. Topics and terms that are likely to be unfamiliar to the average reader should be linked the first time they appear in the article.
Please include properly-formatted inline citations. If you aren’t sure how to do this, please revisit the section of the training module beginning on this page. These references should appear immediately after the statements they support. There should be a minimum of one reference per paragraph, and there shouldn’t be any text after the last reference in a paragraph.
- At least one of your links goes through your library's proxy server - the url includes ezproxy.lib.ndsu.nodak.edu. Links like these are only accessible to people logged into your library, and are inaccessible to everyone else. Please use a DOI to create a properly-formatted reference
Your section headers should not be capitalized (except for the first word).

Check out the Editing Biographies handout (linked here) for more suggestions on layout. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:38, 27 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Group 2! Sounds like you're good to go after you make these changes. Let me know when you're ready to publish. J.R. Council (talk) 19:45, 27 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]