User talk:Ngakona

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Hello, Ngakona, and welcome to Wikipedia! Thank you for your contributions. I hope you like the place and decide to stay. Here are a few links to pages you might find helpful:

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Hello. I am a designated online Wikipedia online volunteer for the Neurobiology (Spring 2014) ‎class in which you have enrolled. Please feel free to ask me any questions you might have about how to use or edit Wikipedia. I can be reached by posting at User talk:DESiegel. You could also post any questions at the Help desk, which is a page for anyone with a question about how to edit Wikipedia. DES ^(talk) 00:12, 16 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Your draft

I just looked at User:Ngakona/ proposal. While I cannot judge the accuracy of the content, I have a few comments on formatting and layout.

As you can see at Wikipedia:Layout and at Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section, Wikipedia articles start with a lead section (sometimes miscalled "the lede"). This section does not have a section header. It looks to me as if User:Ngakona/ proposal#Description/Background will become the lead section of this article. As such, its section header should be removed.
The first mention of the subject, normally in the first sentence of the lead section, should be in boldface.
The first sentence generally constitutes a definition or identification of the subject such as: "X is a specialized Y". This should give a idea of the context to readers who may be totally unfamiliar with the topic. In the first sentence, or somewhere in the lead section, the relevant field of knowledge should be identified. For example the start of Indicator function is "In mathematics, an indicator function or a characteristic function is a function defined on a set X that indicates membership of an element in a subset A of X.... The reader is alerted at once that this is a mathematics topic.
"Calcium" should be "calcium" in running text, it is not a proper name.
I see you have not yet added any citations to references. This is fine at this stage, but you moight want to consider what style of referencing you plan to adopt. Many prefer the citation templates such as {{cite journal}} and the "CS1" style that they produce. Others prefer a "shortened footnotes" style or a "Harvard" or "parenthetical" style. And there are other styles in use as well. Wikipedia does not require the use of any particular reference style, but it does specify that citation style should be consistent in an article. The style will determine what bibliographic metadata you must specify for each reference citation, so it may be a good idea to pick a style early.
Phrases such as "...they are believed to play a role..." should either be attributed to a specific speaker, or else cited to a source that says this belief is widespread or mainstream, or in soeme othe way supported so it is not an opinion floating in the air.
I added {{userspace draft}} to the page. It marks the page as a work in progress, and prevents Google and other robots-compliant search engines from indexing it. It wiull be removed when the page is ready to be moved into the main article space (often called "mainspace")
Wikipedia articles dfo not normally have level-1 headings. When the page is moved to mainspace, this should be removed, as the page title should then serve the function.

I hope these comments are helpful. If you have any questions, please respond here and include {{U|DESiegel}} or [[User:DESiegel]]. Those will notify me of your comment and I will respond promptly. DES ^(talk) 16:40, 14 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]