User talk:Mtiggl1/sandbox

BCarmichael feedback

A good article to add content. References are appropriate, though the writing style needs work. Try to be more direct in the statements. For example, rather than “A part of the reason that this invasive species is an issue …’” convert that to something like “Carduus acanthoides presents multiple factors in growth and reproduction that negatively influence native species.” This is more specific and then allows for transition into aspects like reproduction rate and the number of seeds produced. This would also allow you to share how this species is effecting the ecosystem. BCarmichael (talk) 21:29, 11 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Madi Miller Feedback: article 1

To improve, maybe re-word some of your sentences to where they flow a little better. Added a citation and fixed plagiarism- good. Maybe you could add to the distribution section with this :http://plants.usda.gov/core/profile?symbol=CAAC . Not seeing where you added 1-2 links to other Wikipedia pages/ external sources. I originally posted this in the wrong area, so I just moved it. M.miller (talk) 17:11, 25 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Matthew Gordon Feedback: article 2

I think you did a good job of relating a winter storm watch to a winter weather advisory and you were able to find the plagiarism in the original article which was important. The only information I was unsure about its benefit to the article was the sentence talking about Canada's meteorological service. Also, it seemed a bit repetitive and broke up the structure of the article. To improve the article you could go into detail about precautions that people need to take whenever a winter storm watch is issued. ````Matthew Gordon — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mgord23 (talk • contribs) 03:04, 3 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Jeremy Gremillion Feedback: Article 3

The edits in place seem fairly well-written and well sourced, but the article still feels relatively barren. Creating a separate subheading for the plant as an invasive species could provide you with more room to write about its negative effects while keeping the introductory more concise. In addition, it'd feel more appropriate as an area for calling out Michigan specifically, as it feels a bit odd in the intro currently calling it out as an invasive species in a very specific state, while most introductory paragraphs usually just keep it at a more general level of understanding.

Those points aside, I'd like to see a bit more research or stories about the invasive nature of the species, potentially detailing the ways people have been starting to deal with the threats it presents, or possibly even calling out specific wildlife the plant threatens. Currently all I'm understanding from the Wikipedia article is that it is apparently a very concerning invasive species but I am unsure as to why I should care, bar a quick mention of it being a noxious weed, if that makes sense.

Hopefully this helps! Falgaia (talk) 20:20, 1 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]