User talk:Lyndseyclos
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Hey Lyndsey!
[edit]Hi Lyndsey! What are you going to do your writing assignment #4 on?Laurenabb (talk) 19:46, 6 February 2018 (UTC)
Welcome!
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:27, 14 February 2018 (UTC)
A kitten for you!
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Great job starting on your talk page, Lyndsey!
Jlbrandt (talk) 17:32, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
A kitten for you!
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Good evaluation, Lyndsey. In particular, you bring up good questions about whether or not a photo should be included (will talk more about images from the Media Commons), as well as the relevance of whether or not it is necessary to discuss the conception of her twins.
Jlbrandt (talk) 20:05, 19 February 2018 (UTC)
Hi Lyndsey!
Below is my feedback for Rosemarie Aquilina.
Positives: • Well-cited: almost every sentence has a citation • Diverse/credible/reliable sources: This wiki page utilizes credible and up to date sources from 2013-2018. Sources include Washington Post/ The Guardian/Local newspapers (includes diverse viewpoints) • Neutral content- language is unbiased/balanced (does not take a particular side) • Contents is organized well- has fluid flow throughout the article
Negatives: • Short lead • No pictures/visuals • “Spermbank” in Personal Life- I know we discussed this in class- but is this relevant? Did you find any more information that suggests this is important to understanding her character? • Larry Nassar info could be expanded upon
Overall suggestions: • I would add some more information to the lead. It seems short. • Visuals! Some pictures would be great to put a face to a name. • Expand on her significant role in sentencing Larry Nassar- this has been so important and relevant in the news! Maybe add a separate section under “career” for this? • Scholarly sources! I did not see any- make sure you include some. I believe scholarly sources would provide some rich context to your article.
Good luck! I am excited to see your addition. Laurenabb (talk) 18:34, 24 March 2018 (UTC)
A cup of coffee for you!
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Awesome job on the Aqualina page. The work you put into it really shows. This version is much more organized and is well cited. Jlbrandt (talk) 12:23, 3 April 2018 (UTC) |