User talk:Leelooleo

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"Hello,

I have created my first article. The draft is on my sandbox page (I hope this is the right place). I would like to get some advices from wikipedia experts. Does it look ready to be published? Do you see things that need to be changed? Please kindly give me your advices.

Thank you very much!"

Leelooleo (talk) 14:11, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Leelooleo, One thing that is missing from the article in the lead sentence, is an explanation of what the subject is. Like, is it a form of photography? What makes it so special? A typical sentence might go something like "Cheese Spectrometry is a photographic technique commonly used in the dairy industry to identify contaminants in cheese fats." That's not a great sentence, but it tells us what my imaginary "cheese spectrometry" is. Similarly, when I read your lead sentence I don't know what SWIFTS is, only that it's based on the Lippman architecture. Please remember that articles should be written with some consideration for knuckleheads like me, who don't understand a lot of technical jargon. :) And as was pointed out at the Teahouse, you should use wikilinks to help users get a better understanding of the various concepts you're talking about. I'm going to leave your help request open in case other editors can provide you with further guidance. To anyone else responding to the help request, the article is located here. Cyphoidbomb (talk) 16:19, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

UPDATE: At great expense to my pride, I made a request at WikiProject Spectroscopy to see if any interested, knowledgeable editors could help you out. Hope it helps! Cyphoidbomb (talk) 16:33, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Just a small comment - Have you decided how to get your article into mainspace? - You have a choice...

1. Move it yourself - perfectly allowable once autoconfirmed - note that once in mainspace, if it's not suitable then a raft of delete nominations will hit it.

2. Move it through the WP:AFC process, the page gets reviewed, then approved or rejected - if rejected you can improve and re-submit.

If you do want to go with option 2 - then it needs a minor tweak - move to User:Leelooleo/Stationary-Wave Integrated Fourier Transform Spectrometry (SWIFTS) and change the top template to {{userspace draft}} (template contains the "submit" link to start the AfC process - note there is a couple of weeks backlog I think.)

Hope that helps (if you want it moved as option 2, and can't do it yourself yet, then just ask). Ronhjones ^(Talk) 21:40, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

A couple of additional comments: Firstly, the draft is very technical. For example, I have no idea what a "near-field Lippmann architecture" is, and I doubt many of our readers do. A quick search gave me near-field (mathematics) and near and far field; at a glance the latter seems to be the meaning used in your draft. A link to that article would be nice. How that's related to solar astronomy escapes me, though. Secondly, while the history section is rather well-sourced, your sources end when SWIFTS-based spectrometers appears in 2011 - your most modern sources are from 2007; thus they all seem to predate the subject of your article. The draft could also do with some copyediting for spelling and style, but that's a comparatively minor issue. Huon (talk) 23:31, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

At a second glance, near-field optics seems to be the relevant near-field article. Again, links to related Wikipedia articles within your article's text are a great convenience for the readers. Huon (talk) 23:33, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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Chris1834 (talk) 15:46, 13 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at AfC User:Leelooleo/Stationary-Wave_Integrated_Fourier_Transform_Spectrometry_(SWIFTS)

This notice was a mistake: for the correct one, see above. JohnCD (talk) 14:42, 14 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

What??

You wrote this:

Stationary-wave integrated Fourier transform spectrometry (SWIFTS) technology is based on a near-field Lippmann architecture.

What??? You provided no link to anything called "Lippmann architecture", nor does Wikipedia have anything on that. You haven't even made any attempt to say what field you're talking about. That's no way to start a Wikipedia article. Michael Hardy (talk) 04:36, 15 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your feedback. This is a good point. I thought I had already changed the summary. It is now done. I believe this is clearer. I'll try to add more links in the future.

Leelooleo (talk) 17:51, 15 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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