User talk:Kenzye9/sandbox

Mariam Hanna

I thought the article was informative and detailed. It also was easy to read and understand.
I feel like you need to add more pictures to the article.
Add a research directions section to discuss any previous or ongoing research.
Felt like it could have more hyperlinked to other wikipedia pages.

Mariamhanna21 (talk) 21:20, 16 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Dr. Weiner

Use wikipedia formatting for headers. This will autopopulate the layout. If you need help with wikipedia, come see me!
Link HEAVILY to other wikipedia pages. The first time you use a term, it should be linked.
Every piece of information needs a citation. If you took all the info in a paragraph from one place you can just cite at the end of the paragraph, but no paragraph should be uncited and there should not be a sentence after the last citation.
Nothing should be in the second person. This is a research article, not patient advice. There is no "you".
There are some relevant images in wikimedia commons that would help with anatomy, symptoms, and/or mechanism. I encourage you to make use of them.
A lot of this reads like patient advice rather than like a report. It's not just the second person. Statements like " In order to prevent this it is important to have a proper diet and if there is a lack of vitamins and minerals within your diet take supplements in place of that."
Missing prognosis and research directions
Abstract is missing history information.
You have a lot of good information here! Once you have it properly organized, you will be well on your way.

Sweiner02 (talk) 05:00, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lauryn Frichtl

Nice use of pictures!
Add links
Use the headers given
Add in history information
Make sure everything is cited

192.175.17.38 (talk) 19:32, 18 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Wasiya Naaz

The article provides a detailed overview of plane-form enamel hypoplasia, effectively discussing its causes, symptoms, mechanism, and treatment options. It highlights the multifactorial nature of the condition, emphasizing both genetic and environmental contributors.

Improvement suggestion :

Add clear subheadings for sections such as Signs and Symptoms, Causes, Mechanism, and Diagnosis to improve readability. Use bullet points or numbered lists for detailed content like symptoms and treatment options.

Fix grammar errors, such as replacing "their to be a case" with "there to be a case" or "ameloblast" with "ameloblasts."

Correct the inconsistent use of capitalization, such as "Amelgoenesis imperfecta" to "Amelogenesis imperfecta." 2601:249:8700:739:B121:8C72:687A:C34A (talk) 01:41, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]