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Peer Review 3
[edit]Hi KasiahsMom -
I liked what you chose, the Oregon Department of Corrections Wikipedia article. In just glancing over it, I can see that it is leaning/asymmetrical favoring the functions of the prisons here in Oregon and glossed over abuse/death/rapes/assaults by prison guards. I don't see a source for this sentence "community corrections activities of county governments." in the main paragraph.
To begin I will speak to the lead section as it is posted:
ADD A HISTORY SECTION (?):
The Oregon DOC may have started in 1987, however, there are sources that evidence jails being used before, such as the Oregon Territory Jail (1rst prison in Oregon) 1842. Use of jails/incarceration as a tool of coercion on Indigenous people, however, has even deeper historical roots as these were utilized on early colonial military outposts and utilized to abuse/coerce Tribal people into submission. Another important piece that is often marginalized from discourse is the use of prisons/jails on Indigenous people as a way enforce colonial racial hierarchies - as this page as it is now feels fairly sanitized, I think it would be adequate to highlight some of the less salient aspects of the DOC in Oregon. I understand that highlighting colonialism/prisons may be viewed as 'bias' because these elements are so highly marginalized from American nostalgia.
Also, historically, there was another housing facility where women were housed before Coffee Creek and I believe it was somewhere up in Eastern Oregon in the 1990s'ish.
CONTENTS:
Very little information is built into the contents section - this page appears to be fairly recently constructed, however, perhaps the DOC can be linked to the phenomenon of Mass Incarceration via Wikipedia link?
FACILITIES:
Tbh, the word "facilities" is a rather sanitized way of describing prisons. Prisons by far are some of the most brutal concoctions human beings ever conceived of and to say "Facilities" is akin to calling the internment camps that immigrant families from South America are housed in as "detention centers" or "camps." It really works to mask the grotesqueness of the institution. Under this section, perhaps adding a section that highlights Oregon's racial/ethnic disparities in incarceration would be of use - prisonpolicy.org posts statistics that highlight the phenomenon of locking up people of Color at disproportionate rates and American Indian/Alaskan Natives are incarcerated at staggeringly high rates.
DEATH ROW:
Capital punishment, or rather, can definitely be expanded upon. To the best of my knowledge, Oregon's Death Row Statute is identical word-for-word to that of Texas - MHG is also a great resource as to where to find sources on this, as well as the Law Library on campus, which may be of use. Former governor Kitzhaber has put the use of capital punishment on a moratorium and cited sentences on these topics could also be of use here. "Capital punishment" can be linked in Wikipedia as Wikipedia has an article in the works on it. A law/legal section could be added, however, I understand that criminal law/capital punishment can be daunting to cover. People of Color are disproportionately sentenced to death and this is also missing - perhaps a new section on this?
PRIVATE PRISONS:
I question the DOC's masked innocence here - prison labor is used in Oregon and inmates do a lot of the work in poor working conditions for very little wages. During fire season many inmates fight fires for as little as a few dollars per day. The prison system here also charges an extraordinary amount of money for "COMMISSARY" which may also have a Wikipedia link. Commissary is as small and minute as a single serving of Doritos or Top Ramen and the prices are extraordinarily high - the inflation rate is phenomenal. One of the fancier items include overpriced tiny TVs whose measurements fit within the span of mere inches and tiny Mp3 players that are also grotesquely overcharged. Economic situations in Oregon prisons are dire and the environments are very sanitized, so any outlets to the outside world, such as phone calls, are heavily monitored and extremely costly. Links to the costs of social contact are on the DOC websites and need to be included. Word is out that instead of being able to sit with loved ones behind bars the visits are now done through television screens - allowing even less social contact. These are important aspects of the DOC many forget.
FALLEN OFFICERS:
So there are accounts of fallen officers, perhaps accounts of INMATE ABUSE can be highlighted? https://www.statesmanjournal.com/story/news/crime/2019/02/28/oregon-department-of-corrections-lawsuit-former-coffee-creek-inmates-sex-abuse-rape/2733694002/ this article is one of many highlighted sexual abuse by guards/staff. A whole new section could be added here. Other forms of abuse are physical abuse/mental abuse, as well as denial of medical treatment.
REFERENCES:
Easily the references could be expanded upon to include more sources from marginalized groups and definitely links to MASS INCARCERATION - Oregon prisons are part of these systems as well and MHG could help find the source, perhaps on how Lane County sends more people to prison than any other county in Oregon. These rates of incarceration would add depth to this article in a phenomenal way and unfortunately, are also factual as well.
Looking forward to seeing your article develop - excited here to see what happens
Best Regards
(Ewk'sik'nii13 (talk) 15:57, 20 May 2019 (UTC))
Peer Review 3
[edit]Peer Review 3
[edit]Hi KasiahsMom -
I liked what you chose, the Oregon Department of Corrections Wikipedia article. In just glancing over it, I can see that it is leaning/asymmetrical favoring the functions of the prisons here in Oregon and glossed over abuse/death/rapes/assaults by prison guards. I don't see a source for this sentence "community corrections activities of county governments." in the main paragraph.
To begin I will speak to the lead section as it is posted:
ADD A HISTORY SECTION (?):
The Oregon DOC may have started in 1987, however, there are sources that evidence jails being used before, such as the Oregon Territory Jail (1rst prison in Oregon) 1842. Use of jails/incarceration as a tool of coercion on Indigenous people, however, has even deeper historical roots as these were utilized on early colonial military outposts and utilized to abuse/coerce Tribal people into submission. Another important piece that is often marginalized from discourse is the use of prisons/jails on Indigenous people as a way enforce colonial racial hierarchies - as this page as it is now feels fairly sanitized, I think it would be adequate to highlight some of the less salient aspects of the DOC in Oregon. I understand that highlighting colonialism/prisons may be viewed as 'bias' because these elements are so highly marginalized from American nostalgia.
Also, historically, there was another housing facility where women were housed before Coffee Creek and I believe it was somewhere up in Eastern Oregon in the 1990s'ish.
CONTENTS:
Very little information is built into the contents section - this page appears to be fairly recently constructed, however, perhaps the DOC can be linked to the phenomenon of Mass Incarceration via Wikipedia link?
FACILITIES:
Tbh, the word "facilities" is a rather sanitized way of describing prisons. Prisons by far are some of the most brutal concoctions human beings ever conceived of and to say "Facilities" is akin to calling the internment camps that immigrant families from South America are housed in as "detention centers" or "camps." It really works to mask the grotesqueness of the institution. Under this section, perhaps adding a section that highlights Oregon's racial/ethnic disparities in incarceration would be of use - prisonpolicy.org posts statistics that highlight the phenomenon of locking up people of Color at disproportionate rates and American Indian/Alaskan Natives are incarcerated at staggeringly high rates.
DEATH ROW:
Capital punishment, or rather, can definitely be expanded upon. To the best of my knowledge, Oregon's Death Row Statute is identical word-for-word to that of Texas - MHG is also a great resource as to where to find sources on this, as well as the Law Library on campus, which may be of use. Former governor Kitzhaber has put the use of capital punishment on a moratorium and cited sentences on these topics could also be of use here. "Capital punishment" can be linked in Wikipedia as Wikipedia has an article in the works on it. A law/legal section could be added, however, I understand that criminal law/capital punishment can be daunting to cover. People of Color are disproportionately sentenced to death and this is also missing - perhaps a new section on this?
PRIVATE PRISONS:
I question the DOC's masked innocence here - prison labor is used in Oregon and inmates do a lot of the work in poor working conditions for very little wages. During fire season many inmates fight fires for as little as a few dollars per day. The prison system here also charges an extraordinary amount of money for "COMMISSARY" which may also have a Wikipedia link. Commissary is as small and minute as a single serving of Doritos or Top Ramen and the prices are extraordinarily high - the inflation rate is phenomenal. One of the fancier items include overpriced tiny TVs whose measurements fit within the span of mere inches and tiny Mp3 players that are also grotesquely overcharged. Economic situations in Oregon prisons are dire and the environments are very sanitized, so any outlets to the outside world, such as phone calls, are heavily monitored and extremely costly. Links to the costs of social contact are on the DOC websites and need to be included. Word is out that instead of being able to sit with loved ones behind bars the visits are now done through television screens - allowing even less social contact. These are important aspects of the DOC many forget.
FALLEN OFFICERS:
So there are accounts of fallen officers, perhaps accounts of INMATE ABUSE can be highlighted? https://www.statesmanjournal.com/story/news/crime/2019/02/28/oregon-department-of-corrections-lawsuit-former-coffee-creek-inmates-sex-abuse-rape/2733694002/ this article is one of many highlighted sexual abuse by guards/staff. A whole new section could be added here. Other forms of abuse are physical abuse/mental abuse, as well as denial of medical treatment.
REFERENCES:
Easily the references could be expanded upon to include more sources from marginalized groups and definitely links to MASS INCARCERATION - Oregon prisons are part of these systems as well and MHG could help find the source, perhaps on how Lane County sends more people to prison than any other county in Oregon. These rates of incarceration would add depth to this article in a phenomenal way and unfortunately, are also factual as well.
Looking forward to seeing your article develop - excited here to see what happens
Best Regards
(Ewk'sik'nii13 (talk) 15:57, 20 May 2019 (UTC))
Oregon Department of Correction
[edit]Hi - I wanted to give you some feedback about your additions. I see that you've added a lot of statistics, however not a lot about the correctional system in Oregon. Keep in mind that while there is definite merit in including this in the article, you should also definitely be adding material to the article about the correctional system as well, akin to what's in California Department of Corrections and Rehabilitation and even Correctional Service of Canada, although this last one is in Canada. It should have information about things such as how it's organized, rank, history, and similar things. The prisoner demographics shouldn't be the main focus of the article, if that makes sense.
Also, this needs more citations that are in-line and it would also be good for some of the sections to be written in prose format as opposed to using just lists. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:34, 2 June 2019 (UTC)
@Shalor (Wiki Ed): I am not done editing my article as it is not due till midnight. I will be adding more including the history, inmate abuse, and work/programming provided to inmates. The statistics are not the main point but they substantiate the over incarreation of black and other people of color neutrally, therefore they are important to be seen. Also, what do you mea by in-line? Would listing statistics in a prose format not be hard to see? KasiahsMom (talk) 19:24, 2 June 2019 (UTC)
- With the citations, I mean that the citation should follow the information in the article. It'd show up as a little number after the claim(s). Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:24, 3 June 2019 (UTC)