User talk:Enelly23

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:17, 23 January 2023 (UTC)

Your draft

I returned your draft to your user page because it isn't ready for mainspace.

• You used author-date references, but it's much better to use inline citations. Wikipedia prefers inline citations. It's easy to make mistakes when you format references manually - for example, you have a reference to "CNBC 2019" which I assume is really Higgins-Dunn 2019. Some of your references are also incomplete - for example D&B Hoovers. "Amazon". (2023) doesn't have enough information to track down the original source.

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• I don't think this should be a stand-alone article. There should be some information about Amazon's impact on climate change in the Amazon (company) article. Right now, there's zero mention of it in that article (which is where most people are likely to end up. There is a Criticism section, but climate impact (and environmental impact more broadly) shouldn't be framed as a criticism - it's part of how the company does business.
• The Criticism of Amazon article does have an Environmental impact section; some of your information might strengthen that. But I firmly believe that a company's environmental impact isn't just a criticism - it's a central consideration for how companies do business these days.
• Your tone isn't quite right for a Wikipedia article. You want a more straightforward "just the facts" sort of tone. For example, you say Amazon is undoubtedly one of the largest and most influential companies in the world. You shouldn't say something like "undoubtedly". Stick to facts - for example, you could say Amazon is one of the largest companies in the world, with 1.5 million employees and US$514 billion in revenue (and follow that with sources that support these statements). Obviously if you're adding a section to the Amazon article, you don't need to restate this.

  Saying things like but has a long way to go is similarly not the sort of tone you want.

• You should also link to other articles. Any term that the average reader might not know should be linked, and definitely less familiar terms like CSR should spelled out and linked (corporate social responsibility).

Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:04, 6 March 2023 (UTC)

Your contributed article, Amazon's Carbon Footprint

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Hello, I noticed that you recently created a new page, Amazon's Carbon Footprint. First, thank you for your contribution; Wikipedia relies solely on the efforts of volunteers such as you. Unfortunately, the page you created covers a topic on which we already have a page – Criticism_of_Amazon#Environmental_impact. Because of the duplication, your article has been tagged for speedy deletion. Please note that this is not a comment on you personally and we hope you will continue helping to improve Wikipedia. If the topic of the article you created is one that interests you, then perhaps you would like to help out at Criticism_of_Amazon#Environmental_impact. If you have new information to add, you might want to discuss it at the article's talk page.

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