User talk:Bjones9/sandbox
The Lead section is strong and immediately introduces the topic/artist. Majority of the language used sounds "encyclopedic," but there are a few typos and misused sentence structure. The lead sounds objective and unbiased, but sounds a bit colloquial. It may help to make the lead sound a bit more formal.
Good job siting sources and knowing how to use wikipedia I'm impressed...
There is not table of contents or sections/sub sections, but I assume that'll be added later :)
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