User talk:Azvdo.art/sandbox/Zeytun Gospels

This is an interesting piece of work. I am glad you updated it. My more general comments follow.

Lead Section The lead is a good summary of the material in the remainder of the article. It should explain why the book is called the “Zeytun Gospels” The word “Artist’s” in the second paragraph should not be possessive and not capitalized. Also, this paragraph should have a citation. Clear Structure The structure is clear, but the sections on Origin, Sixteenth and Seventeenth Centuries, and Modern History should have citations. Balanced Coverage This article would be easy to have unbalanced coverage with the genocide (Armenians still remember that event), but you did a good job of noting it as the time when the canon tables were separated from the rest of the book. You kept the coverage balanced. Neutral Content The content was neutral and a significant improvement over the original. Reliable sources I checked some of the sources and was able to locate them. Inclusion of the ISBN was helpful. Suggestions I enjoyed your links to terms I was unfamiliar with, particularly in the lead section. I wish I had provided links to descriptions with graphics in them as you did because they are more descriptive. Your changes added significant insights and detail compared to the original. In the second paragraph of the Lead you use the term “Armenian Artist’s”. The term “Artist’s” should not be possessive or capitalized. I was not sure why you included the images of the cannon tables on the right margin and in the Illumination Gallery. They were also provided in the original article. Also, the last two canon tables in the right margin are identical. It was not clear why so many canon tables were needed. One would be enough to illustrate the exquisite nature of the work. You provided an interesting introduction of the Lamb of God but did not include an image from the book to which you could refer while describing some of the interesting details. In this same paragraph you refer to “Skewray and Nerses of Lambron”. You should explain what they are or provide a link to the description and say why they are important. These references are mentioned again in the next paragraph, but it does not provide much help. Also, the sentence in this paragraph is confusing. In the Stylistic Elements section, the last paragraph would be better if broken into two or more sentences as the one in the article has several different thoughts. Markwhite01 (talk) 17:05, 8 April 2020 (UTC)