User talk:Annieee95
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[edit]Hello, Annieee95, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:18, 23 January 2016 (UTC)
Change to nonverbal communication
[edit]Hi Annieee95, I saw your change to nonverbal communication and wanted to offer a thought. What you added was valuable to the article, but the edit summary didn't give other editors watching the page for changes much to go on. You don't have to be formal or comprehensive, a little note like 'better introduce quote, add advice' would have made the edit a bit more clear for someone seeing it on the article history.
I also removed the second sentence because Wikipedia editors and readers do not expect the articles to be written in the style of a guidebook. If you ever find yourself using the second person in the text of an article, that's a good sign you're moving away from the tone of a general encyclopedia.
Thanks for your changes so far! Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:40, 1 February 2016 (UTC)
Self-objectification Article
[edit]Hello Anne,
The content in your article about self-objectification is good, and provides necessary information about terms like "fat talk" and "old talk." Both of these are terms, along with self-objectification, are terms that many people may not realize exist. By doing so, you're strengthening the language about self-objectification. I did edit some of your material - most of it was just changing terms from passive voice to active voice. You also like to use terms like "very", "actually", and "thing." Try to omit these and find other words, if you can, to strengthen the article. I already omitted most of them, but some sentences could use stronger, more concise words. The section that talks about the cycle of objectification and self-objectification could use more detail rather than saying "so on and so forth." Overall your article is good, and it is definitely a topic more people should be aware of, because it happens to many women. Chelseye123 (talk) 19:56, 25 April 2016 (UTC)
Self-Objectification Article
[edit]Hello,
I fixed some minor grammatical errors in your article. I think your article is very good and interesting to read. I can tell you put a lot of time into it. The only thing I would say is be careful about having an opinion in this article. Wiki is suppose to be neutral and opinions can easily slip into topics like this. I would say read it over yourself again just to be sure, otherwise, good job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Schneids.10 (talk • contribs) 22:45, 26 April 2016 (UTC)