Template talk:Did you know nominations/Thoriqul Haq
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[edit]- ... that after a village in Lumajang Regency, Indonesia, said it did not want a church, Thoriqul Haq took its land and money anyway and built a church along with a musalla? [2024-04-13 at 20:24:13, by AirshipJungleman29]
- ... that even though a village said it did not want a church, Indonesian politician Thoriqul Haq allocated land and money to build one along with a musalla? [2024-04-13 at 20:27:17, by AirshipJungleman29]
GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 21:25, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
- The second hook, above, does not work. The point of the hook is that the politician, who did not own the village or its land, railroaded across democracy, and did what he liked with the village council's land and money. I suggest that you change "allocated land and money" to "nevertheless allocated its land and money". That would make it 169 characters, which is acceptable. Storye book (talk) 09:56, 14 April 2024 (UTC)
- Note - the land is owned by the regency government, not the village. Plus, the villagers rejected a church which had bought land and wanted to build there. Juxlos (talk) 12:19, 14 April 2024 (UTC)
- Thank you, Juxlos. Then the new hook can stand. But since the article and the original hook on the template misled me by omission, it could mislead other readers. So please could you clarify the situation in the article? Thank you. Storye book (talk) 07:53, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
- The second hook, above, does not work. The point of the hook is that the politician, who did not own the village or its land, railroaded across democracy, and did what he liked with the village council's land and money. I suggest that you change "allocated land and money" to "nevertheless allocated its land and money". That would make it 169 characters, which is acceptable. Storye book (talk) 09:56, 14 April 2024 (UTC)