Template:Did you know nominations/Trent Figg

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The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 10:46, 19 January 2022 (UTC)

Trent Figg

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... that current Hawaii football defensive coordinator Trent Figg was on the coaching staff of the United States national team for the 2016 World University American Football Championship? Source: "...Figg served as the DC for the USA Team at the 2016 World University Championship held in Monterrey, Mexico." and "Chief of staff Trent Figg will move to an on-field coaching position as associate head coach of defense."
- ALT1: ... that current Hawaii football defensive coordinator Trent Figg coached for the United States national team in 2016? Source: "...Figg served as the DC for the USA Team at the 2016 World University Championship held in Monterrey, Mexico." and "Chief of staff Trent Figg will move to an on-field coaching position as associate head coach of defense."
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Deon Lendore

Created by PCN02WPS (talk). Self-nominated at 20:29, 7 January 2022 (UTC).

Start review Mujinga (talk) 14:28, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: there's a few things needing sorting here. 1 can i check, do you need to do a QPQ? ~~looks like not, but always worth checking~~ QPQ check didn't work, going to leave you a talkpage message shows me you have done enough DYKs before and therefore need a QPQ 2 the world championship claim is sourced but not the current hawaii coach claim, so you'd need to add the Yahoo! Sports link here. 3 i'm sorry i don't find the hook very catchy, can we try to jazz it up a bit? i looked at the article and i think you've got the best fact, it just needs making more interesting ... Mujinga (talk) 14:40, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

Mujinga, I have added the QPQ and the citation to the hook. How do you suggest making the hook better? PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 18:01, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

I tried making it a little hookier, if that's what you were getting at. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 18:02, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

Yes that's what I meant, nice one for working this through. QP added. ALT0 and ALT1 are now both good to go. Mujinga (talk) 21:32, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

Awesome, thank you for the review! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 21:33, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

@PCN02WPS: oh darn now i noticed repetition of coach in ALT1 on re-reading ... can you change one of them? Mujinga (talk) 21:41, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

ugg same for ALT0 actually Mujinga (talk) 21:43, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

Mujinga, I changed the first instance of "coach" to reflect his specific position at Hawaii - let me know if this works. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 22:09, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

PCN02WPS ah very nice, sorry for the last minute snag, now good to go again Mujinga (talk) 22:14, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

No need to apologize, good catch! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 22:21, 15 January 2022 (UTC)

Tweaked ALT1 to T:DYK/P5