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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:25, 16 April 2012 (UTC)

Themes in Maya Angelou's autobiographies

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  • Comment: This article is actually a forked article that originally appeared in Maya Angelou, created because the original article is too long. All content is original, however.

Created/expanded by Figureskatingfan (talk). Self nom at 20:35, 28 March 2012 (UTC)

Profound, well sourced. However, I can't see the first source where I am right now, the one which supports the hook. Also, I only find that statement in the lead, not - as I had hoped - with an explanation in the article. What do you think of mentioning instead the framed "Human beings are more alike than unalike.", clearer to me than "organic unity"? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 13:11, 9 April 2012 (UTC)
Thanks for the kind words. How about another hook, one that explains things a bit more:
  • "connects them together" is not my favourite expression, what do you think of:
ALT2: ... that Maya Angelou's use of themes in her autobiographies provides all six of them with thematic unity, beginning in I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:43, 9 April 2012 (UTC)
I'm good with that. It's not perfect, but it's an improvement. I can't figure out a way to avoid the passive voice. Your version may be the best we can come up with, considering what we want to convey. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 19:41, 10 April 2012 (UTC)
  • Trying to make her active and repeat less, open for improvement:
ALT3: ... that Maya Angelou uses themes in her autobiographies to connect all six of them organically, beginning in I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:15, 10 April 2012 (UTC)
ALT4: ... that Maya Angelou (pictured) uses themes in her autobiographies to connect all six of them organically, beginning in I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:30, 15 April 2012 (UTC)
ALT4 - open for alternatives, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:32, 15 April 2012 (UTC)