Template:Did you know nominations/Ted Longshaw

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The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 08:07, 27 February 2015 (UTC)

Ted Longshaw

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... that Ted Longshaw not just founded governing body for international radio-controlled car racing, he established them for two continents and the United Kingdom and served for the Royal Navy under the same ship of Prince Philip, Duke of Edinburgh?

ALT1 ... that Ted Longshaw aside founding three governing bodies for radio-controlled car racing and helped to organise its first world championship event; as a signalman, he also served for the Royal Navy with Prince Philip, Duke of Edinburgh on the same ship at the end of Second World War?
Comment: Originally I was going to publish this article in a later date with others I've been working on but another user published this article without my knowledge and I only knew about the creation of this article recently so I have no choice but to nominate this late.

Created by Donnie Park (talk). Self nominated at 17:00, 18 January 2015 (UTC).

Comment: a more detailed discussion can be found here. I'd ask that reviewers consider allowing this late nomination under the circumstances. St★lwart¹¹¹ 22:16, 18 January 2015 (UTC)

Can we have a hook that's not such a jumble of miscellany? Also, what's it mean to serve under a ship? Was he a frogman? EEng (talk) 01:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)

Revised hook to answer your question. Donnie Park (talk) 16:25, 26 January 2015 (UTC)

Um, ALT1 is a lot worse. Let me suggest:

ALT2 ... that Ted Longshaw founded three governing bodies for radio-controlled car racing?

EEng (talk) 16:57, 26 January 2015 (UTC)

Full review needed. Struck original and ALT1 hooks as being way above the 200 character maximum (which includes spaces). BlueMoonset (talk) 20:28, 19 February 2015 (UTC)

This article is acceptable datewise and is long enough. The ALT2 hook information was in the article and I have added some inline citations as required for DYK. The article is neutral and I did not detect any close paraphrasing. QPQ has not been done, but I will donate my review of Lutz Bachmann as this nomination has been hanging around for a long time. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:09, 26 February 2015 (UTC)