The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Evrik (talk) 04:30, 13 February 2021 (UTC)
Overall: DYKcheck shows 3618 characters of prose (includes short quotations). Earwig picks up the longer quotes, but everything else looks good. Joofjoof (talk) 01:02, 7 February 2021 (UTC)
Hi Ashleyyoursmile, I was looking to promote this but felt the hook was inadequate. It doesn't say much about the subject while sounding very promotional. Could you suggest some others? For example, if the desire is to convey musical diversity, perhaps include the various genre's covered in the hook. Best, CMD (talk) 16:34, 10 February 2021 (UTC)
Please feel free to suggest new hooks. Ashleyyoursmile! 13:11, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
Hi Ashleyyoursmile, this has a similar issue in that it claims the album was a grand achievement, but gives no information as to why. It would be better to instead include some part of what makes it a grand achievement. Is it the wide variety of influences? It is the themes conveyed through the music? If it is the reflection of a certain London experience, what is that experience? Your hook for Cool for example included specific examples of the pop references it mentioned. CMD (talk) 13:24, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
Chipmunkdavis, thank you for referring to an excellent example. Here's ALT2:
If you want I can cut down some of the genres. Ashleyyoursmile! 15:24, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
My suggestion would be to remove dubstep, as the sources cited don't give it much prominence, and remove African-diasporic as it is partially redundant to some of the other genres. Would also shorten cumbia to make it match. I'd also keep the "British jazz saxophonist" introduction from your first hook! Like so: CMD (talk) 15:34, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
DYKcheck shows 3618 characters of prose (includes short quotations). Earwig picks up the longer quotes, but everything else looks good. Joofjoof (talk) 01:02, 7 February 2021 (UTC)
Hi Ashleyyoursmile, I was looking to promote this but felt the hook was inadequate. It doesn't say much about the subject while sounding very promotional. Could you suggest some others? For example, if the desire is to convey musical diversity, perhaps include the various genre's covered in the hook. Best, CMD (talk) 16:34, 10 February 2021 (UTC)
