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- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 05:52, 17 January 2014 (UTC)
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Siti Nurhaliza in Symphony
[edit]- ... that despite having the experience of working with the London Symphony Orchestra for her concert at Royal Albert Hall in 2005, Siti Nurhaliza was still nervous in working with the Malaysian Philharmonic Orchestra for her concert in 2013?
Created/expanded by Syfuel (talk). Self nominated at 21:22, 10 January 2014 (UTC).
- I am afraid that the hook is far too long, exceeding the limit by almost 40 characters. Everything else appears to be fine, but I will review more carefully when/if the hook is appropriately shortened. Surtsicna (talk) 02:01, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
- My bad. :( How about:
- ALT 1: ... that despite having the experience of working with the London Symphony Orchestra in 2005, Siti Nurhaliza was still nervous in working with the Malaysian Philharmonic Orchestra for her concert in 2013?
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- ALT 2: ... that despite having the experience of working with the London Symphony Orchestra, Siti Nurhaliza was still nervous in working with the Malaysian Philharmonic Orchestra for her concert in 2013?
- How about ALT3: ... that Siti Nurhaliza was anxious when performing with the Malaysian Philharmonic Orchestra for her 2013 concert, despite having worked with London Symphony Orchestra?
There is no pleonasm there. Anyway, aside from a few spelling and grammar mistakes which I have corrected, the article meets all the requirements. Surtsicna (talk) 08:46, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
- Sorry for the late reply, I was away to pack my stuff and headed back home since I've just finished my undergraduate studies. Sure, I'm okay with the third alternative. :) SyFuelIgniteBurned 02:01, 13 January 2014 (UTC)
- How about ALT3: ... that Siti Nurhaliza was anxious when performing with the Malaysian Philharmonic Orchestra for her 2013 concert, despite having worked with London Symphony Orchestra?