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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:30, 7 May 2014 (UTC)

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Paul Blart: Mall Cop 2

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The Wynn building where the entire film is being shot

  • ALT1:... that Paul Blart: Mall Cop 2 is the first film ever to receive Nevada's new film tax credit?
  • Comment: Both news are big, but I would suggest/prefer first hook most.

Moved to mainspace by Captain Assassin! (talk). Self nominated at 20:06, 21 April 2014 (UTC).

  • Date, length, both hooks checks out. From what I can see the nominator has 2 DYKs, so no QPQ needed. --Soman (talk) 18:40, 30 April 2014 (UTC)

- The article needs to be copyedited before it makes it to the front page. The "Development" section, especially, reads like a news release. I've attempted some copyedit but more work is needed. Please improve the prose. — Preceding unsigned comment added by EagerToddler39 (talk • contribs) 03:22, 1 May 2014‎ (UTC)

  • The concerns I raised re the "development" section were not addressed. I placed a ce section tag and it was simply removed. The only edits to the section were to insert a few interwiki links and insert 2014 with two of the dates. I would like to see the blow-by-blow account: on January 7, 2014 → On March 14, 2014 → On March 25, 2014 etc. removed. That section reads too much like a daily tabloid news account and not a style appropriate for a Wikipedia article. The information laid out like this is too haphazard. How about mentioning all the persons who were added to the cast in one sentence/paragraph, regardless of when they were added. The mention of someone else joining the cast after the release date was mentioned is clumsy. EagerToddler39 (talk) 11:34, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
  • Restoring tick initially placed by Soman. Copyedit issues have been addressed and length remains acceptable. EagerToddler39 (talk) 01:44, 7 May 2014 (UTC)
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