Template:Did you know nominations/Mouse Morris

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The result was: promoted by PumpkinSky talk 02:30, 29 August 2012 (UTC)

Mouse Morris

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... that the mother of Irish horsetrainer Mouse Morris was awarded an MBE for her work as a cryptographer at Bletchley Park during World War II?

Created/expanded by Finnegas (talk), Tigerboy1966 (talk}, Nominated by Finnegas 21:40, 4 August 2012 (UTC)

The hook checks out, but this is a bit short of 5x expansion. Also, there seem to be some inconsistencies with the non-hook references and the facts described in the text (particularly in the last paragraph). If any reviewers have experience deciphering horse racing results, it would be most helpful. IronGargoyle (talk) 06:15, 23 August 2012 (UTC)
I have made a number of changes to the article so hopefully it is more clear now Finnegas (talk) 15:19, 23 August 2012 (UTC)

Finnegas, just so you know, you shouldn't be using any of the first four official icons in your own replies; these are for reviewer use. To clarify the "bit short of 5x expansion" comment, the article has 548 prose characters prior to expansion, and currently has 2561. It needs 2740 prose characters in order to qualify. I've added an extra instance of a citation so that the Bletchley Park sentence has its own cite, which is required by DYK even if it's the same cite as the one a sentence later, and fixed up some spacing and punctuation issues. (Note: not familiar with horse racing, IronGargoyle, so no help from this quarter.) BlueMoonset (talk) 18:01, 23 August 2012 (UTC)

There are also significant paraphrasing problems across multiple sources, sometimes with direct copy [1], [2]. The chart data for the horses mentioned in the last paragraph is accurate (shd stands for "short head" and the Irish racing results have tabs for the first and last start for a given horse). Froggerlaura ^ribbit 02:39, 24 August 2012 (UTC)

Have changed article to deal with issues concerning significant paraphrasing [3] + [4] + [5] Finnegas (talk) 13:03, 24 August 2012 (UTC)

Paraphrasing problems fixed. 40 characters short of 5x but will pass. Hook is cited, neutral, no POV/ move stable issues with article. Froggerlaura ^ribbit 23:06, 28 August 2012 (UTC)