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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 03:28, 12 December 2014 (UTC)

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Mamadou N'Diaye (basketball, born 1993)

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Created by Temple of the Mousy (talk). Self nominated at 00:38, 20 September 2014 (UTC).

  • New article is large enough, and nominated in time. The main hook is problematic, since NCAA basketball is currently in the off-season, and the term "active" is ambiguous. It is unclear if any new players recruited for the upcoming season are as tall or taller. ALT1's claim of "nearly losing his vision due to a tumor" comes from the site theleaguenews.us, which does not seem like a reliable source. It has only been around since 2013, and one of the minimum writer requirements for that site is merely being 14+ years old. ALT2 is not that interesting in that it only deals with "attempts to verify claims". Pending is QPQ from nominator, and checks if this article is within policy.—Bagumba (talk) 15:59, 4 October 2014 (UTC)
  • I added a reliable source, the LA Times, to the ALT1 hook. Please check it out for a second time. Temple of the Mousy (talk) 18:16, 4 October 2014 (UTC)
  1. The LAT article says the tumor "threatening his sight", it does not support the article's "During the surgery, doctors estimated that N'Diaye would likely lose most of his vision", nor ALT1's "nearly losing his vision due to a tumor".
  2. Not supported by LAT article: "He was also looked after by Stoneridge Preparatory School. N'Diaye was later adopted by a married couple in Huntington Beach, California, near the future high school where he would play basketball."
  3. While the quote "could barely get up and down the court more than a few times" is cited, it should be attributed if the quote is to stay. However, why not just paraphrase and present as a fact without the need for full quote?
  4. "Ndiaye is a legit 7-foot-5 prospect with extraordinary length and huge hands." needs a citation immediately after the quote (WP:INTEXT).
  5. WP:QPQ is pending. Otherwise, article seems neutral, adequately cited.—Bagumba (talk) 08:22, 9 October 2014 (UTC)
  • I have made some more changes based on the mistakes you pointed out. Temple of the Mousy (talk) 23:50, 9 October 2014 (UTC)
  • New reviewer needed. Issues above should be rechecked to be sure they've been addressed. However, the nominator doesn't yet have five DYK self-nominations, so a QPQ is not required. BlueMoonset (talk) 02:43, 7 November 2014 (UTC)
Just for the record, @Temple of the Mousy:
  1. I've removed the statement "would likely lose most of his vision" since it's not cited and striked ALT1. Feel free to readd if you want to rephrase it.
  2. Contrary to popular belief, schools are not primarily used for child care. Neither is guardianship the same as adoption. I've rewritten that sentence, leaving out the first part to avoid repeating a later section.
  3. The article generally needed more inline cites. Most of the facts were in sources but not explicitly attributed. I've removed the following due to a lack of attribution:
  • N'Diaye was labeled one of the best recruits of the Class of 2013.
  • He was ranked the 12th best center and the 85th best overall player by Rivals.com.
  • He was listed as a four-star recruit by the majority of basketball recruiting websites.
  • N'Diaye is often considered one of the biggest players in college basketball history.
Since the season started this week (did you know that it has been two months since this was first nominated?):
ALT3:... that UC Irvine center Mamadou N'Diaye is currently the tallest basketball player in NCAA Division I? Fuebaey (talk) 16:08, 22 November 2014 (UTC)
ALT4:... that UC Irvine center Mamadou N'Diaye was named Big West Conference Defensive Player of the Year during the 2013–14 NCAA Division I men's basketball season?
ALT5:... that UC Irvine center Mamadou N'Diaye arrived in the US without knowing how to speak English? Fuebaey (talk) 17:26, 30 November 2014 (UTC)
  • I would offer some different hooks or at least clean up the phrasing we've got, but this has been sitting around long enough I think. ALT5 is sourced, no QPQ required, neutral, sourced, long enough, new and on time, minimal copied phrases per Earwig's doohickey. ALT5 is G2G. — LlywelynII 08:09, 1 December 2014 (UTC)
  • If the source and article both have the phrase "because he liked the coaching staff and the school's strong academics and athletics" (the only difference is "liked" vs. "likes"), then this is certainly a case of close paraphrasing (if not copyvio) and not acceptable—and that's only a single source. It looks like Earwig's tool has been improved since it was deprecated for use on DYK since it can now check the sources actually used in the article, but the percentage number is clearly useless if it encourages a verdict of "minimal" here. The age of the nomination is no reason to reduce basic standards. BlueMoonset (talk) 12:44, 1 December 2014 (UTC)
  • It wasn't a paraphrase at all: it was simply lifted. But A) it was less than a full sentence, B) expressing his personal reasons, C) phrased as a sourced indirect quote. There was no problem here in the first place and even less of one now that it seems the indirect quote has been replaced with a direct one. We should be careful about copyright violations (and I have less sympathy now that I've checked some of my articles and seen how much lower my own numbers are), but there are only so many ways to express certain exact formulations. Earwig's tool was more accurate on this than your opinion was.
    (As an aside, the snark about "age of the nomination not being a reason to half-ass it" fails WP:AGF—as well basic reading comprehension—by a country mile. I was talking about reworking the hooks or not; the sentence fragment you were fixated on had nothing to do with what I was talking about.) — LlywelynII 14:22, 1 December 2014 (UTC)
@BlueMoonset: Please note that this is not my nomination and I'm not particularly familiar with American college basketball. I may not catch every problem in this article, although I would not expect any other reviewer to either. The nominator seems to have abandoned this and I would normally close it if I didn't think I was able to salvage it. Earwig has a percentage of up to 33% for this article on some sources, but it doesn't differentiate between quotes and actual copyvio. It also picks up short three word statements like "a married couple", "to the United States" and "Ndiaye is a" which as a biography should at very least be covered under WP:LIMITED if at all challenged. I've converted the sentence highlighted into a direct quote to be clear. You've mentioned "and that's only a single source" - do you have more specific objections or is that just being speculative? Fuebaey (talk) 15:30, 1 December 2014 (UTC)
Sorry if I have been inactive recently. I'll take a more detailed look at this article in the near future, but with the changes made so far, and I can't find any issues myself.Temple of the Mousy (talk) 15:44, 1 December 2014 (UTC)
  • This is an article I'd definitely like to see on the main page. Regrettably, I have to put this on hold again: at least one quote in the article does not match its source, and I don't have time to do a more thorough check at the moment. Compare "could hardly get up and down the court more than a few times due to his tumor" in the article with the cited source's "he could barely get up and down the court more than a few times" (FN6, sportsonearth.com). I can understand miscopying "hardly" as "barely"; I can't the addition of "due to his tumor", words the source did not have, and that do not appear to be factually correct: the tumor was gone by this point according to the account in FN6, and N'Diaye was still recovering from the surgery. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:50, 2 December 2014 (UTC)
  • I've edited that sentence to reflect the source. Any more problems? Fuebaey (talk) 12:57, 2 December 2014 (UTC)
  • Since Moonset isn't satisfied with the DYK checklist and apparently is holding out until this reaches GA status , I suppose we have time to improve some of the hooks (3 & 4 failing "interest"):
    ALT5a: ... that UC Irvine center Mamadou N'Diaye arrived at Stoneridge Prep in the US barely knowing how to speak English?
    ALT6: ... that UC Irvine center Mamadou N'Diaye grew up playing soccer before being noticed by the Seattle Redhawks?
    ALT7: ... that 7'6" Mamadou N'Diaye's medical bills for the golf ball-sized tumor in his pituitary gland were paid by charitable donations?
     — LlywelynII 05:34, 3 December 2014 (UTC)
  • Reviewer needed for the remaining ALT hooks. (I've changed the second ALT5 to ALT5a—the two are quite similar—to avoid potential confusion.) I have no further quote or close paraphrasing issues. BlueMoonset (talk) 14:39, 3 December 2014 (UTC)
  • :REVIEW COMPLETED - The following has been checked in this review by Esemono
no QPQ required
Article created by Temple of the Mousy on September 17, 2014 and has 6,788 characters of readable prose
NPOV
ALT7 Hook is interesting, short enough and sourced with Refs 7 and 8
Hook ALT7 is sourced to :discovered he had a large tumor ... The school was unable to afford treatment for Ndiaye's condition. But a charity drive was able to amass the needed funds and Ref 8 diagnosed with a tumor ... The golf ball-sized mass. Stoneridge didn't have adequate insurance to cover surgery but found charitable foundations in Orange County that would
Every paragraph sourced
Earwig @ Toolserver Copyvio Detector found no copyvio
GTG -- Esemono (talk) 23:38, 5 December 2014 (UTC)
The fact that he is 7'6" seems irrelevant to the hook. I'm proposing ALT8 without the height, which would probably need metric equivalent if it were to stay.—Bagumba (talk) 00:19, 6 December 2014 (UTC)
  • Bagumba, it's because of the tumor that he grew so tall, and it's his height and basketball that makes him notable. You've just removed the remaining reason he's interesting from the hook: lots of people with unusual names have operations paid for through charities. Striking ALT8, and suggesting new ALT based on the previous two:
@BlueMoonset: The article currently does not mention that "because of the tumor that he grew so tall". The height as currently mentioned in the hook serves only as a random tidbit; the bulk of the hook is about the tumor, and no relation is given to his height. Perhaps ALT3 should be reconsidered, or a new hook proposed that makes it clearer why his height is being mentioned. While I am a basketball fan, a non-fan might see 7'6" as being the same as 6'9" i.e. they are both taller than most readers.—Bagumba (talk) 00:50, 7 December 2014 (UTC)
  • Bagumba, 7'6" is extremely tall and a good hook fact in itself; I think most people know that it's unusual and well beyond the norm. The article had said "N'Diaye was suffering from a golf ball-sized tumor in his pituitary gland, which controlled his growth", so it was certainly implied in the article that the tumor was responsible for his unusual growth; I've changed "controlled" to "affected", which I think is better. FN6 clearly says that the tumor was responsible, as pituitary tumors release excess growth hormone. Since we seem to disagree on hook fitness, I'm happy to get an outside opinion. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:59, 7 December 2014 (UTC)
I have no objection to anyone that decides to approve any of the hooks based on our discussion.—Bagumba (talk) 03:54, 7 December 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm concerned about non-medical sources using phrases like "may account for his oversized growth" and "which controls growth" being turned into the definitive "pituitary tumor caused Mamadou N'Diaye to grow to 7 ft 6 in" for ALT10 and ALT11: "caused" is a major stretch, and one likely to get a hook using it pulled from prep. (Incidentally, I'd be happy with replacing ALT9's "the golf ball–sized tumor in his pituitary gland" with "his golf ball–sized pituitary tumor" from the later hooks; it's more concise.) BlueMoonset (talk) 16:45, 9 December 2014 (UTC)
  • Agree. I think MEDRS should apply to such statements, particularly if we're going to plaster them on the front page. Mind, maybe a member of the medicine WikiProject would disagree. You could ask one of them. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 11:24, 10 December 2014 (UTC)
  • Okay, striking ALT10 and ALT11 per Crisco 1492. ALT9 is still in play, and writing out ALT9a based on my previous comment about revising the ALT9 wording:
If a reviewer doesn't like either of the ALT9 variants, another hook suggestion is always welcome. BlueMoonset (talk) 17:26, 10 December 2014 (UTC)
ALT8 was struck earlier because "it's his height and basketball that makes him notable", as well as "lots of people with unusual names have operations paid for through charities". Moreover, a hook cannot mention any causality between his height and tumor because of concerns raised above with WP:MEDRS. For ALT9/9A, I still maintain it seems trivial to mention his height without expanding on its significance. I'd suggest the hook deal with his height alone. I'm proposing ALT12, which is a modified version of ALT3. Hopefully someone can decide among the available hook options and get this DYK promoted.—Bagumba (talk) 01:49, 11 December 2014 (UTC)
Disclosure: I did copyedit this article a few weeks ago. If anyone wants to prolong the nomination (almost three months and three reviews later), feel free to strike this. I'm going with ALT12 - a variation on the original hook, which is stated and cited in the lead. Otherwise the article is new and long enough. Neutral and sourced, with no obvious copyvio. No QPQ required as nominator only has two DYKs. Fuebaey (talk) 00:24, 12 December 2014 (UTC)
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