Template:Did you know nominations/Lee Ratner

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The result was: promoted by Miyagawa (talk) 09:57, 17 May 2015 (UTC)

Lee Ratner

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... that d-CON founder Lee Ratner (pictured) started Florida's first planned community, created a mail-order computer programming class, was involved in oil exploration, and sold a rocket ignition device for autos?

Reviewed: Alan Clark (businessman)
Comment: Two different pic available to pick from.

Created by ThaddeusB (talk). Self-nominated at 01:37, 6 April 2015 (UTC).

I'll review this. Give me a brief while. Vanamonde93 (talk) 22:26, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
This should be GTG. The article was new enough when nominated (7 days) and is certainly long enough. It is within policy; it is neutrally written, free of any copyvios that I can find. It is definitely sourced thoroughly enough. I have checked the sources I have access to; AGF on the others. The images are both acceptable (ie free use), although I am leaning towards the one on the left; anyhow, promoter's decision. The QPQ is complete. The hook is neutral, cited inline (multiple refs) and short enough. My only suggestion is the following; the hook is <200 characters, but still a trifle clunky. Might I propose ALT1 below (with the appropriate picture), for which no new review would be needed, as it merely omits the (IMO) most confusing fact from the original. Promoter's call; the original is not in violation of any guideline. Vanamonde93 (talk) 01:30, 15 May 2015 (UTC)

ALT1: ... that d-CON founder Lee Ratner (pictured) started Florida's first planned community, created a mail-order computer programming class, and was involved in oil exploration?