Template:Did you know nominations/June 20, 1985 bombings in Nepal

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The result was: promoted by Gilderien Chat|List of good deeds 17:32, 17 May 2013 (UTC)

June 20, 1985 bombings in Nepal

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... that Ram Raja Prasad Singh and Khema Raj Mayalu were sentenced to death in absentia following the Nepal bombings in 1985?

Reviewed: Awakening (Star Trek: Enterprise)

Created by Soman (talk). Self nominated at 16:59, 13 April 2013 (UTC).

Passes New, Content was created on 13 April, with all edits made by nominator.

Passes Long enough, there is 1551 characters of prose, not including footnotes.

Passes Policy, appears to be neutral, cited with inline citations, etc.

Passes BLP, article is not a biography article and thus avoids tags.

Passes Hook format, hook length is 121 characters long

~~Hold~~ Passes Hook content, ~~hook is interesting, cited to this source, and appears to be neutrally worded. However, it can be said to be critical of Khem Raj Bhatta Mayalu, who as far as that article says appears to be alive.~~ ALT1 hook appears to pass hook requirements.

Passes QPQ, reviewed a DYKN.

N/A Image, no image used in article.

--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 20:28, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

I found another ref, which does not state that Mayalu would have been sentenced to death. Thus, ALT1, that Ram Raja Prasad Singh was sentenced to death in absentia following the Nepal bombings in 1985? --Soman (talk) 02:40, 2 May 2013 (UTC)

Although I think ALT1 would work, there are more concerns than just the hook. This article is marked a stub, which should be dealt with. And there is some evidence of close paraphrasing in the last sentence. "palace hardliners", "discredit". I'm sure you can come up with some terms of your own.—♦♦ AMBER^(ЯʘCK) 13:13, 2 May 2013 (UTC)

Stub tags removed and last sentenced reworded. --Soman (talk) 01:31, 3 May 2013 (UTC)

Awesome, I see progress has been made. However, I'm not that great a fan of that newly applied maintenance template (please resolve that), nor of the fact that the article doesn't seem to have a bolded intro.—♦♦ AMBER^(ЯʘCK) 14:16, 3 May 2013 (UTC)

Article now divided into sections, clarifying that the first 3 sentences constitutes a lede. --Soman (talk) 18:00, 4 May 2013 (UTC)

Article appears to have been improved, however I am still concerned about the hook, as it does not appear to meet

neutral and does not focus unduly on negative aspects of living people

Is there something else that can be used for the hook?--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 18:28, 4 May 2013 (UTC)

Where is the BLP issue? The ALT1 hook only mentions Ram Raja Prasad Singh, who 1) is dead and 2) was quite proud of having been declared public enemy number 1 by the monarchy. The hook is notable, since Singh was later one of key contenders for the post as president of Nepal. --Soman (talk) 23:33, 4 May 2013 (UTC)

I was referring to Khem Raj Bhatta Mayalu. I would be OK with ALT1.--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 00:22, 5 May 2013 (UTC)

Same here. Make sure the article starts with a bolded intro (you could structure it like this: 1999 Vladikavkaz bombing). In my humble opinion, this article will then be ready to be sent on its way.—♦♦ AMBER^(ЯʘCK) 12:20, 5 May 2013 (UTC)

Article approved with hook ALT1. Soman, I hope you have learned something about article writing from this discussion. Who knows, if you're a good student you might go on to get another DYK. :) Drmies (talk) 04:19, 17 May 2013 (UTC)