Template:Did you know nominations/George FitzGeorge Hamilton
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:32, 4 October 2018 (UTC)
| DYK toolbox |
|---|
George FitzGeorge Hamilton
[edit]
George FitzGeorge Hamilton
... that George FitzGeorge Hamilton (pictured), godson of King George V and Queen Mary, was killed in an aerial bombing raid in France during World War I?Sources for godparents: Dod's Peerage, Ltd. 1917, p. 368.; Selsey 57, 2018; and Bognor Regis Observer, 1918. Sources for death: Selsey 57, 2018; Winchester College, 2018; and Washington Post, 1918
- Reviewed: 1939 NCAA Basketball Championship Game
- Comment: Please feel free to suggest alternative hooks for this article! -- West Virginian (talk) 15:46, 12 August 2018 (UTC)
Moved to mainspace by West Virginian (talk). Self-nominated at 15:46, 12 August 2018 (UTC).
-
@Editorofthewiki: you should provide a review that explicitly confirms that the five main DYK criteria have been met. An optional Reviewer's Template is located above the edit window. IMO the hook is not hooky enough. Yoninah (talk) 19:47, 26 August 2018 (UTC)
- ALT1:
...that George FitzGeorge Hamilton (pictured) was a godson of George V and Queen Mary, heir to two baronetcies, and was killed in World War I while retrieving his leave pass, according to his family?
- Yoninah, how about ALT1? I crafted this hook from my mobile phone, so I will add the necessary sources here when I have access to my laptop. ALT1 is a bit long at 199 characters, but it draws in significant facts from the article prose. Please let me know if you have any recommendations for how to improve upon this! Thanks again for taking the time to improve this hook. — West Virginian (talk) 12:46, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for the alt hook, West Virginian. I think you should zero in on the hooky part rather than synopsizing the article:
- ALT2: ... that according to family lore, George FitzGeorge Hamilton (pictured), a godson of George V, was killed in a World War I bombing raid while retrieving his leave pass? Yoninah (talk) 14:21, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
- Yoninah, this works perfectly! Thank you for your suggested ALT hook! I made one minor adjustment, and that was to change great-grandson to godson. FitzGeorge Hamilton was the great-grandson of Prince George, Duke of Cambridge. I prefer George V for the hook since he has a more succinct title! Thank you again for improving this hook! — West Virginian (talk) 14:56, 31 August 2018 (UTC)
- The following source has the information for both pieces of information in the hook: Selsey57 Voluntary Community WWI Project 2018 -- West Virginian (talk) 16:38, 31 August 2018 (UTC)
- ALT1:
- Full review is still needed covering the DYK criteria, and also of ALT2. BlueMoonset (talk) 23:46, 31 August 2018 (UTC)
- Note: Cwmhiraeth, I have reverted your promotion of this to prep because the ALT2 hook was never reviewed, and indeed a full review was never done, as noted by Yoninah above. Please only promote nominations where a tick is the most recent icon showing. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:57, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
As this has been stuck for a while and the original nominator hasn't returned to this page, I'll be doing a full review. The article was new enough at the time of the nomination (nominated the day it was moved to mainspace). Article is adequately sourced, and the hook is verified inline. QPQ was provided. Earwigs gives a score of 34.6% with the Selsey57 source, but this seems to be more due to the repetition of military titles and minor repetitions; the source is adequately referenced in any case. ALT2 should be good to go. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 12:56, 3 October 2018 (UTC)