Template:Did you know nominations/Dawn Gan
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Evrik (talk) 15:37, 31 July 2022 (UTC)
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Dawn Gan
ALT0 : ... that Singaporean singer Dawn Gan acted as herself but not as a singer in a television drama about aspiring singers?Source: https://eresources.nlb.gov.sg/newspapers/Digitised/Article/newpaper19890410-1.2.19.2- Reviewed:
Created by Justanothersgwikieditor (talk). Self-nominated at 07:20, 14 July 2022 (UTC).
I think the hook fact is a bit interesting but it's currently written a bit confusingly. As far as I can tell, the hook fact here is that she acted as herself, but not as a singer. Maybe the wording can be clarified here? Alternatively, another possible hook could focus on her acting as herself in said drama, which is probably interesting by itself. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 11:38, 19 July 2022 (UTC)
- @Narutolovehinata5: I am suggesting two alternates: ALT1 following your suggestion but not sure whether does it has a high appeal to interest, ALT2 is a slightly longer clarification of ALT0.
- ALT1 : ... that Singaporean singer Dawn Gan acted as herself in a television drama about aspiring singers?
ALT2 : ... that Singaporean singer Dawn Gan acted as herself in the role of an undergraduate student instead of a singer in a television drama about aspiring singers?- I would actually prefer ALT1 over ALT2. --Justanothersgwikieditor (talk) 01:31, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
- I think ALT1 works. Right now what I think needs to be done is a copyedit. The article mentions her career before stuff like her birth and education. Usually we'd put such things near the start of a biography rather near the end. Stuff like her children, her cancer diagnosis, and her death can remain where they are right now. Also, I think the article would benefit from a copyedit. The full review will follow once all of these are addressed. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 14:02, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
- Let's roll with ALT1 then. I done the content shift and asked robertsky to copyedit further. Please do see the article is alright now. Thanks --Justanothersgwikieditor (talk) 04:10, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
- It's almost ready. I've verified the hook fact in the source. It only needs just a little more copyediting and it will be good to go. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 10:35, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
- Copyedited a bit more, anything in particular needed? Thanks Justanothersgwikieditor (talk) 05:10, 25 July 2022 (UTC)
- Almost there. There's just one slight issue with the table in the "Works" section (it appears to have empty entries). It's a technical issue and could probably be quickly fixed. The section does say it's incomplete, but the incomplete tag is not orange so it's allowed for DYK purposes. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 04:42, 28 July 2022 (UTC)
- Empty row in table removed. --Justanothersgwikieditor (talk) 05:05, 28 July 2022 (UTC)
- Almost there. There's just one slight issue with the table in the "Works" section (it appears to have empty entries). It's a technical issue and could probably be quickly fixed. The section does say it's incomplete, but the incomplete tag is not orange so it's allowed for DYK purposes. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 04:42, 28 July 2022 (UTC)
- Copyedited a bit more, anything in particular needed? Thanks Justanothersgwikieditor (talk) 05:10, 25 July 2022 (UTC)
- It's almost ready. I've verified the hook fact in the source. It only needs just a little more copyediting and it will be good to go. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 10:35, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
- Let's roll with ALT1 then. I done the content shift and asked robertsky to copyedit further. Please do see the article is alright now. Thanks --Justanothersgwikieditor (talk) 04:10, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
- I think ALT1 works. Right now what I think needs to be done is a copyedit. The article mentions her career before stuff like her birth and education. Usually we'd put such things near the start of a biography rather near the end. Stuff like her children, her cancer diagnosis, and her death can remain where they are right now. Also, I think the article would benefit from a copyedit. The full review will follow once all of these are addressed. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 14:02, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
Thank you. ALT1 is approved. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 09:24, 28 July 2022 (UTC)
