Template:Did you know nominations/Aron Anderson
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The result was: promoted by valereee (talk) 12:11, 7 June 2019 (UTC)
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Aron Anderson
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Aron Anderson after completing Vasaloppet
... that adventurer Aron Anderson (pictured) climbed as the first person in a wheelchair to the peak of Kebnekaise, Sweden's highest mountain?Source:[1]ALT1:... that Aron Anderson completed a so called "Swedish classic", in which he competed in and finished Vasaloppet (pictured), Vätternrundan, Vansbrosimmet and the Lidingöloppet during one year, this as the first person in a wheelchair?Source: [2]ALT2:... that Aron Anderson was the first person in a wheelchair to climb to the summit of Mount Kilimanjaro?
- Reviewed - Gulabsinh
Created by BabbaQ (talk). Self-nominated at 23:19, 3 May 2019 (UTC).
This article is new enough and long enough and I have done a little copyediting. The image is appropriately licensed, the hook facts are cited inline, the article is neutral and I detected no copyright issues. I have amended ALT0 and added ALT2 because most people will be unfamiliar Kebnekaise and with the endurance events mentioned in ALT1 but will have heard of Kilimanjaro. A QPQ has been done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:35, 28 May 2019 (UTC)
- I'm feeling like the hooks could use some copyediting for awkward construction. "Person in a wheelchair" is just kind of long and clunky, could be changed to the shorter "wheelchair user", "so called" isn't necessary when "Swedish classic" is already in quotes, "climbed" feels jarring to me but that may be a personal preference, I'd probably prefer "summited"? And both ALT0 and ALT1 have some grammatical issues. How would people feel about tweaking to
- ALT0a: ... that adventurer Aron Anderson (pictured) was the first wheelchair user to summit Kebnekaise, Sweden's highest mountain? Source:[3]
- ALT1a: ... that Aron Anderson completed a "Swedish classic", competing in and finishing Vasaloppet (pictured), Vätternrundan, Vansbrosimmet and the Lidingöloppet within one year, the first wheelchair user to do so? Source: [4]
- ALT2a: ... that Aron Anderson (pictured) was the first wheelchair user to summit Mount Kilimanjaro? --valereee (talk) 20:19, 28 May 2019 (UTC)
- Looks good to me. Hope one of the inages in the article is used to to highlight this inspirational person.BabbaQ (talk) 20:21, 28 May 2019 (UTC)
- Giving it further thought, I also think the "wheelchair user" makes better sense given that the photo doesn't show him using a wheelchair but rather a sort of sled in a skiing race, so he didn't actually compete "in a wheelchair." Ditto the Vätternrundan and Vansbrosimmet, which are bike and swim races; probably wasn't actually in the wheelchair for those either. He probably did compete in the Lidingöloppet in a racing chair, as that's a cross-country race, but the sources mention him using crutches and crawling on the mountain climbs. Sorry if this seems like nitpicking, the main page just gets so much scrutiny lol. Cwmhiraeth, what do you think? --valereee (talk) 14:57, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
- There is a lot in what you say Valereee. Approving ALT0a, ALT1a and ALT2a, which are better, and striking the previous hooks. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:52, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
- I've been copyediting the article, and the Athletics section repeatedly refers to him participating in three sports: sailing, sledge-hockey, and "athletics." I suspect "athletics" is a poor translation -- perhaps in Swedish, the same word is used for general athletics and for a particular sport? Anyone know Swedish well enough to give us a better translation? --valereee (talk) 14:32, 31 May 2019 (UTC)