Talk:Z-4 Plan/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 00:35, 3 August 2014 (UTC)

Progression

• Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
• Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review

• Citations: The Citation Check tool reveals no issues with reference consolidation (no action req'd).
• Disambiguations: no dab links [3] (no action req'd)
• Linkrot: no dead links [4] (no action req'd)
• Alt text: images lack alt text so you might consider adding it [5] (not a GA requirement, suggestion only).
• Copyright violations: The Earwig Tool reveals no issues with copyright violations or close paraphrasing [6] (no action req'd).
• Duplicate links: one repeat link to be removed:
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Criteria

• It is reasonably well written.

  a (prose): b (MoS):

  • "The co-chairs of the International Conference on the Former Yugoslavia, David Owen and Thorvald Stoltenberg were closely involved in the political process surrounding the Z-4 Plan"... I think there may be a paired comma missing here. Consider instead: "The co-chairs of the International Conference on the Former Yugoslavia, David Owen and Thorvald Stoltenberg, were closely involved in the political process surrounding the Z-4 Plan..."
  • This is a little repetitive: "While Tuđman was displeased with the received proposal, the RSK authorities, influenced by Serbian President Slobodan Milošević, refused to receive the document..." Specifically you use "received" and "receive" in the same sentence. Can this be reworded?
  • Typo here I think: "The first such initiative, launched in later...", consider instead "The first such initiative, launched later..."
  • Missing word here: "Despite last-ditch efforts by Galbraith to persuade Milošević and RSK leadership...", consider instead: "Despite last-ditch efforts by Galbraith to persuade Milošević and the RSK leadership..."
  • Missing definite article here: "In November a plan was negotiated to halt fighting pending...", consider instead: "In November a plan was negotiated to halt the fighting pending..."
  • "Further negotiations produced agreements on reopening of a section of the Zagreb–Belgrade motorway traversing...", consider wording more simply as: "Further negotiations produced agreements on reopening a section of the Zagreb–Belgrade motorway traversing..."
  • Not sure of the wording here: "In essence it created legal foundation for a permanent existence of a Serb state within Croatia." Consider instead: "In essence it created a legal foundation for the permanent existence of a Serb state within Croatia."
  • Missing definite article here too: "...whose borders were based on results of the 1991 Croatian census...", consider instead: "...whose borders were based on the results of the 1991 Croatian census..."
  • This is repetitive prose: "...over the following four months. Over the period...", consider instead something like: "...during the following four months. Over the period..."
  • "... David Owen and Thorvald Stoltenberg requested amendments of the plan...", should be "...David Owen and Thorvald Stoltenberg requested amendments to the plan..."
  • "provision that Croatia cedes..." → "...provision that Croatia cede..."
  • "...between former Yugoslav republics...", should be "...between former the Yugoslav republics..."
  • "...and that the UNPROFOR...", abbreviation should be expanded at first use.
  • "... but he received the draft anyway knowing that Milošević' opposition...", should this be possessive, i.e. "... but he received the draft anyway knowing that Milošević's opposition..."
  • this is repetitive: "...held based on the Z-4 Plan, but refused to meet Galbraith, who wanted Milošević to pressure the RSK into accepting the Z-4 Plan, on 2 August...", consider instead: "...held based on the Z-4 Plan, but refused to meet Galbraith, who wanted Milošević to pressure the RSK into accepting it, on 2 August..."
  • multiple issues here: "At the meeting, the RSK insisted on withdrawal of the HV from western Slavonia and gradual implementation of a ceasefire, followed by economic cooperation before a political settlement is discussed." Consider instead: "At the meeting, the RSK insisted on the withdrawal of the HV from western Slavonia and the gradual implementation of a ceasefire, followed by economic cooperation before a political settlement was discussed."
  • Multiple issues here: "Following Croatian military success against the RSK (Operation Storm) in August and in Bosnia and Herzegovina, against the Republika Srpska (Operation Mistral 2) in September, the US President Bill Clinton announced a new peace initiative for Bosnia and Herzegovina." Consider instead: "Following Croatian military success against the RSK during Operation Storm in August and in Bosnia and Herzegovina, against the Republika Srpska during Operation Mistral 2 in September, US President Bill Clinton announced a new peace initiative for Bosnia and Herzegovina."
  • No MOS issues I could see.
    • All addressed.  Done

• It is factually accurate and verifiable.

  a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

  • Article is well referenced with most major points cited to WP:RS.
  • No issues with OR that I could see.

• It is broad in its coverage.

  a (major aspects): b (focused):

  • All major points seem to be covered with an appropriate level of coverage.

• It follows the neutral point of view policy.

  a (fair representation): b (all significant views):

  • No issues I could see.

• It is stable.

  No edit wars etc.:

  • No issues here.

• It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.

  a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:

  • Only a location map so no issues with non-free images.
  • Wonder if there are any relevant images which might be included? (suggestion only)
  • Captions look ok.

• Overall:

  a Pass/Fail:

  • Although I've listed quite a few (mostly prose issues) they are fairly minor. Overall, I found the article to be well constructed and it seems to cover the topic quite well. Happy to discuss anything you disagree with. Anotherclown (talk) 05:27, 9 August 2014 (UTC)

Thank you very much for the review. I have applied changes to the prose as recommended, and removed overlinking too.--Tomobe03 (talk) 11:55, 9 August 2014 (UTC)

Gday. All my points have been address so I am passing now. Solid work as usual - well done. If you are looking at taking it higher you might like to look to see if there are a few more images that could be added but its not a big deal (the map is very good in my opinion and is certainly sufficient for this level). Anotherclown (talk) 22:12, 9 August 2014 (UTC)