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Nominator: Spookyaki (talk · contribs) 17:25, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Borsoka (talk · contribs) 15:10, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it well written?
    A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
    B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
  2. Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
    A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
    B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
    C. It contains no original research:
    D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
    B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
  4. Is it neutral?
    It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
  5. Is it stable?
    It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
  6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
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    B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:


Comments

    • I do not find.
  • Malcolm invited Kochiyama to meet with him at his office to discuss his stance on integration, but was unable to do so initially due to his conflict with Nation of Islam (NOI) leader Elijah Muhammad. I do not understand.
    • I made some adjustments: She initiated a conversation with him, expressing admiration for his work but criticizing his "harsh stance on integration". Malcolm invited Kochiyama to meet with him at his office to discuss his stance on integration further, but was unable to do so initially due to fears for his personal safety arising from his public conflict with Nation of Islam (NOI) leader Elijah Muhammad. Do you need me to go into detail about the Elijah Muhammad stuff? In an earlier draft of the article, I wrote up a bit of explanation, but it ended up being extremely complicated and not really relevant to the article, so I thought a link would be sufficient. Spookyaki (talk) 04:34, 6 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • I would link Racism against African Americans to "the racism".
    • Done.
  • ...present for Malcolm's assassination... For?
  • She attended the rally with her son Billy, who was sixteen at the time. Is this necessary?
  • ...whose tents... Tents?
  • Link imam.
  • She hid her conversion from most of her family with the exception of her daughter Aichi. Do we know why?
    • Quoted in Heartbeat of a Struggle, she says that "I didn’t think they’d be interested, and I have to say, I was a little afraid to bring it up because I didn’t think they’d understand. Besides, everyone in our house was so busy, we didn’t talk about things in detail. They thought I was seeing political activists in prison as I had done for years, but I never told them about my becoming a Muslim. I think Aichi was the only one I told—she was curious." I changed the sentence to Worrying about how her family would react, she hid her conversion from her husband and children, only discussing it with her daughter Aichi. Does that seem alright? Spookyaki (talk) 04:34, 6 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • She also deconverted from Islam in 1975. Do we know why?
    • Not really sure, to be honest. Fujino says "Following Billy’s death, Yuri reduced her activities to devote more time to her family. But even as she ended her Muslim practice in 1975, she found herself caught in the urgency of other issues." If I had to guess, it was probably related to Billy's death and her withdrawal from activism, but that's just personal speculation. Spookyaki (talk) 04:34, 6 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link soup kitchen.
  • ...Aichi's common-law husband, Alkamal Duncan, died of sickle cell anemia and... Is this necessary? If yes, rephrase the whole sentence because now it implies a connection between Duncan's death and Kochiyama's loss of her position.
  • However, after being given "reading materials" by RCP member Phil Farnham to "become ‘educated’ on the real situation in Peru", she "came to completely support the revolution [there]". Name the source of the quote in the text. Borsoka (talk) 03:33, 6 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    • Changed to However, according to Kochiyama, after being given "reading materials" by RCP member Phil Farnham to "become ‘educated’ on the real situation in Peru", she "came to completely support the revolution [there]". Spookyaki (talk) 04:34, 6 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

I found all images properly licenced and relevant. Borsoka (talk) 03:37, 6 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Source review

  • Reliable sources (mainly newspapers, but also encyclopedia articles and books) are cited.
  • Is Ishii (2022) a reliable source?
  • References 1 and 6 are verified.
  • Would you quote texts (here on the review page) verifying references 14, 27, 42, 53, 56, and 93? Borsoka (talk) 05:35, 8 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Regarding Ishii, I think so. I was using WP:NEWSORG as guidance there: "Otherwise reliable news sources—for example, the website of a major news organization—that publish in a blog-style format for some or all of their content may be as reliable as if published in standard news article format." You could argue that he maybe verges on WP:PRIMARY, since he seems to run the committee now.
  • [14] The Jerome War Relocation Center closed on June 30, 1944... — "Date Closed: June 30, 1944" (Niiya)
  • What about this part of the sentence: "...and Yuri's family returned to San Pedro in 1945"? I do not find its verification in the cited source.
  • Covered by [15], a sentence down. "When the war ended in 1945, Yuri’s family decided to return to their home in San Pedro, California. By then, Jerome had already closed and the remaining internees, including her mother, had been transferred to the camp in Rohwer. So Yuri went there to accompany her family back to California." (Fujino, p. 76)
  • [27] ...a political advocacy organization created by Malcolm to further the civil rights movement... — "That same month of March 1964, Malcolm began planning a second group, the Organization of Afro-American Unity (OAAU) which would allow him and his followers to engage in activism and enter the civil rights arena in ways that the NOI, frustratingly, had not allowed." (Payne & Payne, p. 666-667)
  • [42] Then on the weekend... — "Then on the weekend, at least every other weekend, we’d visit the political prisoners. Everybody went according to if they had the money because it costs money to go to a prison. So each person went when they could. I mean everybody has their whole life and things they have to do at home. But I’ll tell you, we were busy during this time. Every week, more brothers and sisters would be arrested. We were working on scores of cases at the same time—trying to keep up with visiting, writing, attending court hearings. If I could show you all the leaflets we made, you’d get an idea of how expansive the work was." (Fujino, p. 204)
Subsequently, after the arrest of the members of RAM, she organized a fundraising event on their behalf so that they could meet their $200,000 bond. — "Yuri wrote a lengthy article on the organizing campaign for the Queens 17 in the North Star that year. The group Friends of the 17, which included Yuri, was busy publicizing the event through articles and appeal letters in numerous Movement publications, raising funds to pay for the $200,000 bail bond." (Fujino, p. 200)
She also corresponded with imprisoned members of the Black Panther Party (BPP); acted as a point of contact for many political prisoners affiliated with the RNA; and advocated on behalf of the Harlem Six, Martin Sostre... and various other imprisoned political activists. — "To respond to the arrests of many of their comrades, Yuri and others in New York, including newly released Panther 21 defendants, formed the National Committee to Defend Political Prisoners (NCDPP). Yuri was regarded as one of its most consistent members. 'Yuri, out of all of us, was in touch with prisoners and supporters the most,' observed NCDPP member Nyisha Shakur. 'People would call her relentlessly, just all the time... She was seemingly writing and visiting most of the political prisoners and really staying on top of it.' 'Yuri diligently wrote, sent information, made sure we were kept up-to-date about different issues,' recounted Ahmed Obafemi about his prison time in the mid-1970s. 'Yuri communicated with everybody. She was... the central figure,' he concluded.
Through the NCDPP, and with many of its members before its establishment, Yuri defended numerous political prisoner cases in the late 1960s and early 1970s. She worked on the RNA 11, Harlem 6, Harlem 5, Tombs 7, Rap Brown 4, Carlos Feliciano, Martin Sostre, New Haven 3, Puerto Rican independentistas, and numerous Black Panther Party and Black Liberation Army cases." (Fujino, p. 203)
Further discussion of Kochiyama's role as a point of contact for the RNA is in [46], and discussion of her advocacy for Mutulu Shakur in in [45].
  • [53] ...Lolita Lebrón, a Puerto Rican nationalist who had been arrested in 1954 after shooting at a group of United States Representatives alongside Rafael Cancel Miranda, Andres Figueroa Cordero, and Irvin Flores... — "The second notable attack occurred on March 1, 1954, when four members of the Nationalist Party shot at members of the U.S. House of Representatives. The attack was led by Lolita Lebron, who shouted, 'Viva Puerto Rico Libre' before she and her associates Rafael Cancel Miranda, Andres Figueroa Cordero, and Irving Flores Rodriguez opened fire on the assembled congressmen." (Caban, p. 500)
  • What about this part of the sentence: "As part of her work with political prisoners, Kochiyama met Lolita Lebrón..."?
  • Actually misread the source here, but it was supposed to be covered by [54], at the end of the blockquote. It seems like they corresponded but did not actually meet:

    Lolita Lebron, for example, had lost a son and a daughter under suspicious circumstances while in prison. Knowing this, Yuri gained solace and strength from these words from Lebron in prison: "Receive my profoundest condolescence. Your son liveth in the infinite love and glorious happiness of our Creator. ... I understand and participate in your pain. I have a son in Heaven. He died on account of the struggle. Imperialism killed him. He was a little boy who said when he becomes a grown man, he would build a house for his mother. He built it: It is a house upon the Rock. I embrace you in these difficult days—courageous as you are and beautiful!” Yuri herself observed: “I don’t know what I would’ve done if I didn’t have the Movement. I feel the Movement kept me going and I’m grateful for that. (Fujino, p. 224)

Adjusted for accuracy.
In 1979, President Jimmy Carter commuted the sentences of Lebrón, Flores, and Cancel and posthumously granted clemency to Figueroa, who had died of cancer in 1978. — "In 1979, President Jimmy Carter commuted the sentences of Lolita Lebron, Irving Flores, and Rafael Cancel Miranda after they had served twenty-five years in prison. Andres Figueroa Cordero was granted clemency posthumously. He had died of cancer in March 1978 after having been released from prison because of his terminal illness." (Caban, p. 500)
  • [56] Yuri also founded the Day of Remembrance Committee in New York to commemorate the day President Franklin D. Roosevelt authorized Executive Order 9066. — "...Yuri also stood up for her own, fighting for Japanese American redress and reparations by co-founding Concerned Japanese Americans and the New York Day of Remembrance Committee." (Ishii)
  • Not fully verified: she is a co-founder, according to the cited text, and the cited source does not refer to Executive Order 9066.
  • Yeah, not sure what I was thinking there. I think I will just delete that sentence.
  • [93] In 1993, Rea Tajiri and Pat Saunders produced a documentary about her life entitled Yuri Kochiyama: Passion for Justice. She also featured in the documentaries My America...or Honk if You Love Buddha, directed by Renee Tajima-Peña... and When Mountains Take Wing, directed by C.A. Griffith and H.L.T. Quan. Several biographies were also written about her, including 1998's Yuri: The Life and Times of Yuri Kochiyama by Japanese journalist Mayumi Nakazawa and 2005's Heartbeat of Struggle: The Revolutionary Life of Yuri Kochiyama by Diane C. Fujino. — "Her life is featured in the Japanese-language book 'Yuri: The Life and Times of Yuri Kochiyama' (1998) by Mayumi Nakazawa; her memoirs, 'Passing It On' (2004), edited by Marjorie Lee, Akemi Kochiyama-Sardinha and Audee Kochiyama-Holman; her biography, 'Heartbeat of Struggle: The Revolutionary Life of Yuri Kochiyama' (2005); and two documentaries, 'Yuri Kochiyama: Passion for Justice' (1993) by Pat Saunders and Rea Tajiri and 'Mountains that Take Wing: Angela Davis and Yuri Kochiyama — A Conversation on Life, Struggles and Liberation' (2009) by C.A. Griffith and H.L.T. Quan. She and her husband also appeared in Renee Tajima-Pena’s 1997 documentary 'My America … or Honk If You Love Buddha.'" (Rafu Shimpo)
All Power to the People is mentioned in [92].
Spookyaki (talk) 06:42, 8 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Spookyaki: When do you think you can address the pending issues? Borsoka (talk) 02:41, 14 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Oh, sorry. I didn't see that you had responded. Probably today or tomorrow. Spookyaki (talk) 03:22, 14 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Spookyaki (talk) 03:45, 14 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

My all concerns were addressed so I pass the article. I always love reading nicely written articles about minor actors in world history. Thank you for completing it. Borsoka (talk) 03:40, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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