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GA Review

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Passed. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 00:36, 9 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: SupremeLordBagel (talk · contribs) 06:45, 21 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: The Sharpest Lives (talk · contribs) 22:36, 4 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]


  • Hey- we're getting close. I want to let you know I requested a mentorship for this GAN because I wanted to make sure I'm doing everything correctly. Feel free to check out their comments here. PSA raises some good notes. I already updated the NFUR for the song sample, but I haven't changed anything in the caption. PSA says that "most ambitious" isn't a very helpful descriptor- so maybe you could cite a review that notes its' sound? Ex) Critics noted "Owl" for its' blend of this and that. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 05:53, 7 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    PSA also noted the two uses of "It was announced". (Both are under §Background and recording) The first could be changed to "Hull-Brown, Angus and Khadiwala also announced in September that they would leave the band after a final set of shows..." while the second could be changed to "On 6 September 2022, the independent management company Lemon Tree Music announced that they would sign with the Cat Empire." The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 06:02, 7 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
checkmark Semi-done Fixed overuse of "it was announced" per your suggestions. SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 08:14, 7 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I looked at the references for the "Owl" sample: you could note its African influences (per ref 1) and its large orchestration (per both refs). Something like: Critics, along with the band themselves, noted "Owl" for its African influences and large orchestration. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 17:39, 8 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Thank you! SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 00:05, 9 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Good already

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  1. Both the album cover and the song sample have non-free use rationales, and all images pertain to the topic and have precise captions.
  2. There are no edit wars, as SupremeLordBagel (talk · contribs) seems to be pretty much the only editor.
  3. Grammar, writing, etc. is good. The article was written in a neutral tone.
  4. The article stays within scope and goes into detail on the background, composition, touring, etc.

Fixes

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Sourcing

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  • I noticed that there are quite a few primary sources (Instagram, YouTube, Facebook, etc). Could you find secondary sources for these claims? I ran some cleanup scripts on the page, and it automatically tagged the primary sources with {{Primary source inline}}. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 23:18, 4 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    This is my main concern at the moment. There are at least two claims with the tag, and I think you should at least find a secondary source for the ABC Radio National claim (section: Release and promotion), but the documentary claim just needs tweaking. Change it from Over August and September, a four-part documentary on the album's recording was released. to something like From August to September band released a four–part documentary on Facebook documenting the album's recording process. That way the using Facebook as a source is more valid (in my opinion). Though- the sentence structure may need to be changed. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 15:24, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
checkmark Semi-done Reworded documentary claim per your suggestion. I'm working on finding a secondary source for the ABC Radio National claim, but I can't find anything - only other radio appearances later in the year. SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 20:50, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I tried looking for a source, but couldn't find one. It might be better to just remove it. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 03:07, 7 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done That was my thought too. SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 04:30, 7 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • The release of the album came more than four and a half years after their previous album, Stolen Diamonds (2019), the longest gap between their albums to date. Is there a source saying this specifically? If not it seems like OR. It is not verified in the body, so I would go ahead (if no sources can be found) to change it to something like "Where the Angels Fall was released four and a half years after their previous album, Stolen Diamonds (2019).". The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 02:47, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 04:12, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The information on the Cat Empire homepage is contained underneath the tour header. I noticed that there were dates on the band's website that weren't listed on the Music Feeds article, which was why I used their website as a reference. I'll admit that the band's website is definitely a primary source, so I might try to find one that's a little more independent. SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 04:19, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for pointing that out. I recommend just searching "cat empire australia six shows" or something similar on google to find a source. I recommend using this search engine to find reliable sources- it's been really helpful for me in the past. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 16:08, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
checkmark Semi-done I've found a better source for the six Australian shows. I'm looking for sources for the North American shows. SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 10:27, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I'm looking for sources right now. I found one that might be helpful: Do 617 - The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 14:48, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done The North American shows are now all sourced. SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 00:18, 9 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm not finding a source for the quote "When we came to record the album, I wanted to think about the Cat Empire more as a community of musicians than just a like-for-like replacement of band members. [...] It was really important for us to treat every song like a world of its own, and so we brought in a lot of musicians to create and reflect that". It isn't from the Rolling Stone source referenced below, so is there another place you got the quote from? The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 03:09, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done This quote is from the Audio Technology interview. I wasn't quite as experienced with reference formatting when I wrote this article - thanks for catching that! SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 04:22, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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  • The caption for the "Owl" sample seems a little redundant. Perhaps change "A sample of the Cat Empire's "Owl"; some critics, and the band themselves, noted the song for being one of their most ambitious". to something along the lines of "Critics, along with the band themselves, noted "Owl" as one of the band's most ambitious". That may need to be clarified as well because I'm not really sure what ambitious means in this context. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 01:56, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Changed to "Critics, along with the band themselves, noted "Owl" as one of the band's most ambitious songs." SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 09:37, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Changed to "The band avoided double tracking during recording, instead choosing to bring in more players." SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 20:49, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry, I haven't been able to find any other reviews - this was actually the main difficulty I had when I originally wrote the article. SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 10:42, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You're good! I'm not going to fail this just because of the lack of reviews, I promise. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 13:39, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I might actually remove the quote and reword this sentence, so as to prevent overquoting (and for clarity). SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 00:30, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Sounds good to me! The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 00:39, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Changed to "Riebl stated that the band was attempting to recapture the "roominess" of their previous recordings at EGREM Studios." SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 01:20, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per my mentorship mentioned above, PSA mentioned the lead. It needs info about the music itself. All you need to do is summarize the composition section and put it in the lead basically. Make sure to double check WP:LEAD if you need. + PSA suggests paraphrasing more in the reviews section rather than direct quoting. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 06:14, 7 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done – Added composition info to lead section. I've shortened one quote and paraphrased another, but I wasn't sure what to do with the others. If you have any suggestions on how to further paraphrase the reviews, please let me know! SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 07:29, 8 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I think the quote but said that "happiness can get tiring, believe it or not, and some euphoric episodes, such as "Coming Back Again" become rather showy and excessive" can be shortened. Perhaps to but called the album tiring on songs like "Coming Back Again", which "[became] rather showy and excessive". Other than that the section looks fine. The Sharpest Lives (the deadliest to lead) 16:11, 8 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done – SupremeLordBagel (talk to me) 00:22, 9 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.
    a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
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