Talk:Weather Machine/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zanimum (talk · contribs) 23:57, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Description and history

Ponzi winning the international competition should come before the list of contributors. As it is currently, the brackets look out of place in the middle of the list. Also, was there any coverage of the call for entries? Even just when the call was would be of interest. Does the five years include time before they won the bid, or was it that long a delay in installation after things were awarded?
- The work is often attributed to Omen Design Group. When names are mentioned, they are mentioned as a collective. I went ahead and removed the parenthetical, but I think keeping the names of the contributors together is important, as the sources do this as well. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I did not find details about the competition itself, or the reason for the delay. From what I can gather, the artists just spent time working on the various pieces of the sculpture and assembling them in Beaverton. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:55, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The sculpture is inspired by Terence O'Donnell, and his funny jig. Is there a significance of O'Donnell to the sculptors? Or was it just "here's a random Portland resident". I've added that he's local, feel free to modify.
- This came up during the Guild of Copy Editors review as well. Multiple sources said O'Donnell inspired the sculpture, without indicating exactly how. I did not leave out any important information here, I just incorporated what sources stated. Thanks for adding the local bit. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Could you reference the fact that the square opened in 1984? The name makes it sound like the town square in Back to the Future, something that had been there forever.
- Doing... --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Done. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:54, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Was Willard Scott the Today weather man at the time? If so, this would explain his significance to the dedication.
- Done. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Between 25 and 33 ft tall... do the statue's appendages really add that much height, or is it a case that the reporting is that variable? If different sources report different heights, I'd suggest it's time to contact the Pioneer Courthouse Square workers to settle which sources are right on this matter.
- Reporting is variable, hence the range. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - The rewording of the prose helps with that. Presuming there's no official webpage, that'll work. -- Zanimum (talk) 23:32, 20 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Red lights mark ever ten degrees. How many red lights are there? ie, how high can the temperature go before it hits its peak?
- Sources do not mention the number of lights, or the temperature peak. Otherwise, I would include this information. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"you don't want to breathe so much when the white light is on”: I thought that white lights meant "above freezing"? Or is there another set of white lights?
- This is a separate light system. There is not a connection between the white light for temperature and the white light for air quality. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"and indicated a temperature of 82 degrees." I thought it could only indicate temperature in ten degree increments.
- Red lights are in ten degree increments. This does not mean the machine cannot display only increments of ten. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"This prompted the executive director of Pioneer Courthouse Square to consider altering the machine's schedule so that the public would have a chance to see all three symbols." Huh? How's that work?
- Manual operation. I cannot find a source stating whether or not this took place, just that it was a possibility. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - I get the manual operation bit, but they'd stop on the symbol for a minute before going onto the next? Anyway, not critical. -- Zanimum (talk) 23:32, 20 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

External links

Do the image links add anything to the readers understanding of the sculpture?
- Yes. Both images show "helia", the sun symbol, in detail, which is not available in the article (or at Commons). --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - I've renamed the links to indirectly explain the reasoning. Feel free to reword. -- Zanimum (talk) 23:32, 20 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Here's the start. -- Zanimum (talk) 23:57, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. I have responded to all of your comments; please let me know if any concerns remain to be addressed. I have searched the online material very thoroughly plus the online Oregonian archives through the library, which go back to 1987. --Another Believer _(Talk) 15:49, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, everything seems to be as solid as possible, passing. Congrats (and sorry for not noticing your edits sooner)! -- Zanimum (talk) 23:32, 20 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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