Talk:Washington Park Historic District (Albany, New York)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Andrewmc123 16:29, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Some general rephrasing of certain sentences or phrases is required before its at GA standard. See details below.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   A few more references needed, particularly in the 'Monuments' section.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Prose

• The first sentence of the lead needs rephrasing, especially at the phrase "is that city's premier park". Perhaps change 'that' to 'the'.
• In the second paragraph in the lead, the phrase 'grace the streets' is possibly verging on WP:WTW in the Manual of Style.
• In the section 'Cemetery and parade grounds' I suggest making some of the sentences slightly shorter, particularly the sentence beginning "In 1800 the land west of Knox Street...".
• "A few such as 694 and 710 Madison..." - A few what?

References

• Are there any more references for the Marinus Willet Memorial?

Just wanted to say that I've fixed some issues, and I'm working on others. Thanks for putting this on hold for a week, it may take that long for me to get to it.
--Gyrobo (talk) 19:50, 21 November 2010 (UTC)