Talk:Visions of Mana/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 11:08, 20 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Shooterwalker (talk · contribs) 23:57, 27 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Finding myself with more time soon. I will dive in soon and see how far we can get. Shooterwalker (talk) 23:57, 27 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Gameplay

First sentence is a solid summary. Consider turning the semicolon break into a new sentence.
"During travel across semi-open areas the player can" -> "As the player travels through semi-open areas, they can also..."
"Outdoor environments have collectables and chests that can be opened, with some chests" -> "Outdoor environments have collectables and treasure chests, with some..."
"Field areas can be travelled on foot or using animal mounts, with ocean exploration allowed using a giant turtle and navigation of the overworld by air on a dragon." -> "Players can travel over land on foot or riding an animal mount, with additional options for riding a seafaring turtle or a flying dragon."
"and items and abilities" -> "with additional abilities"
"items, new weapons, and equipment." -> "items, equipment, and weapons."
"Party members can equip one weapon and one set of armour, and Ability Seeds. Ability Seeds alter a character's abilities and attributes are dictated by ability seeds, changing statistics or boosting one attribute while lessening another." -> "Party members can equip one weapon and one set of armour. Characters can also equip Ability Seeds, which alter their abilities and attributes, for example by improving one while decreasing another."
"During the game, up to ten equip slots can be unlocked for each character to use Seeds." -> "Each character can unlock up to ten slots to equip Seeds."
"During combat, a gauge called the CS Gauge is filled, and when full the controlled character can deliver a Class Strike for high damage, with the type of attack varying depending on the equipped class." -> "During combat, each character can accumulate and fill a Class Strike Gauge, allowing them to unleash a unique class ability for high damage."

The writing is generally good. Just some minor fixes so far for readability and grammar. Let's start there and I'll try to check back in soon. Shooterwalker (talk) 00:10, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]