Talk:Untitled (Richard Fleischner artwork at Alewife station)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:04, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "by Richard Fleischner located" can we say something like "American artist" or some similar wording?
  •  Done
• "artwork - an environmental" en-dash, not hyphen.
  •  Done
• "landscape - cost $" ditto.
  •  Done
• "cost $40,000 to" inflate.
  •  Partly done I did the inflation in the main section, where it works better in parallel to the other inflation.
• "on a parcel nested" is that a "parcel of land"?
  •  Done
• "the massive 5-story" massive not needed, and I would say "five-story".
  •  Done
• "from the Arts on the Line project" is it worth noting in the lead that this work was one of this project's outputs?
  •  Done
• I think the year of creation should be in the Artwork section somewhere.
  • It's already in the lede and the history; I don't think the date is particularly relevant to the description of the artwork itself.
• "Council's Arts on the Line program" link this first time.
  •  Done
• " $695,000 USD" I don't think you need $ and USD. Also inflate.
  •  Done
• Any critical reception for this piece of work?
  • Not that I can find at the moment, unfortunately, but I'll check that 1987 article when I find my copy.
• Check references, plenty of spaced hyphens or year range hyphens/page range hyphens that should be en-dashes.
  •  Done
• Ref 6, avoid SHOUTING.
  •  Done
• Other categories, like "Sculptures in Massachusetts" may be better suited than just a basic "Cambridge, Massachusetts" category.
  •  Done
• And what about Category:Granite sculptures in Massachusetts?
  •  Done Good catch!

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 09:45, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: I believe I've addressed all your comments. (And don't forget about Talk:River Works station/GA1 :) ) Pi.1415926535 (talk) 18:10, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

I won't [[1]]. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:12, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

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