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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 18:05, 2 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

My third review for the GAN backlog of this month! --K. Peake 18:05, 2 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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Background and composition

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Release and reception

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Music video

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Credits and personnel

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Charts

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Weekly charts

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Year-end charts

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References

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Final comments and verdict

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  • @Kncny11: I do see it in that manner too somewhat, but to fix this I would recommend splitting the single release sentence from the recording one (starting release one with "the song"). Also, you could move the last two sentences of the first para to opening the following one and add to the lead what was praised specifically about the song. Regarding the part about a ref being solely at the end of the sentence, that means not invoking the ref mid-sentence when it is already at the end. My last points are that you should include the song featuring drums in the comp because that is notable even though the description belongs in reception and I congratulate you for your plausible amount of progress on this! --K. Peake 20:55, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Kyle Peake: I played around with the intro again, and moved the citation. I added a sentence at the end about the guitars and drums, since most reviews seem to mention both. I guess it didn't seem notable to me, because I actually play lead guitar in a metal/post-hardcore band (with a pop punk side project, because sometimes I don't want to have to shred), and those instrumental elements seemed pretty par for the genre. Kncny11 (shoot) 15:49, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Kncny11:  Pass now, but I did some brief copy editing of where there were issues with the flow of the lead and the prose itself in the body, though I wholheartedly commend your hard work on improving this article. It may have been a little later than you would usually aim for, but one week is the standard amount of time it is recommended for an article to be onhold so five days later is quite good. --K. Peake 16:30, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]