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You should add as the second sentence the full writing credits for the song due to the lead currently being too short, plus mention them in the body since everything here has to be written there DoneKncny11(shoot)23:50, 3 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"The song was recorded at" → "It was recorded at" plus this should be the sentence after writing and before release in the new order DoneKncny11(shoot)19:31, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
""Uncomfortable" was a response to lead vocalistLzzy Hale's fear" → "it was a response to Hale's fear" because you will have already mentioned her full name by adding the songwriters sentence, also introduction should solely be in the body DoneKncny11(shoot)19:31, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Split commercial performance into a different sentence, mentioning the US Hot Rock & Alternative Songs and Rock Airplay positions DoneKncny11(shoot)19:31, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The source says the album was released on April 6, 2015, which is incorrect because it is written as April 10 here and on the main article DoneKncny11(shoot)18:50, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The descriptive words used in the opening sentence can be used as part of reviews that should be written out here, as there are not enough to back up widespread acclaim
"Internationally, "Uncomfortable" spent one week in October" → "Elsewhere, "Uncomfortable" spent one week in October 2018" but this should be after the Billboard year end position per geographical order DoneKncny11(shoot)18:10, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"showing some of the process behind filming "Uncomfortable." part is not properly sourced; maybe just mention it was a behind the scenes video for the visual? DoneKncny11(shoot)20:54, 5 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Kncny11 I appreciate how you have been taking your time to ensure everything is covered; however, the writing credits are listed in the lead but not the body. --K. Peake14:39, 5 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Kncny11: I do see it in that manner too somewhat, but to fix this I would recommend splitting the single release sentence from the recording one (starting release one with "the song"). Also, you could move the last two sentences of the first para to opening the following one and add to the lead what was praised specifically about the song. Regarding the part about a ref being solely at the end of the sentence, that means not invoking the ref mid-sentence when it is already at the end. My last points are that you should include the song featuring drums in the comp because that is notable even though the description belongs in reception and I congratulate you for your plausible amount of progress on this! --K. Peake20:55, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Kyle Peake: I played around with the intro again, and moved the citation. I added a sentence at the end about the guitars and drums, since most reviews seem to mention both. I guess it didn't seem notable to me, because I actually play lead guitar in a metal/post-hardcore band (with a pop punk side project, because sometimes I don't want to have to shred), and those instrumental elements seemed pretty par for the genre. Kncny11(shoot)15:49, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Kncny11:✓Pass now, but I did some brief copy editing of where there were issues with the flow of the lead and the prose itself in the body, though I wholheartedly commend your hard work on improving this article. It may have been a little later than you would usually aim for, but one week is the standard amount of time it is recommended for an article to be onhold so five days later is quite good. --K. Peake16:30, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Done Kncny11 (shoot) 20:54, 5 March 2021 (UTC)
Partly done I changed it to positive reception instead, since there isn't actually more than those descriptions. Kncny11 (shoot) 19:31, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but don't feel afraid to reach out if you are stuck on anything! --K. Peake 21:51, 2 March 2021 (UTC)