Talk:Tropical Storm Ana (2009)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ealdgyth - Talk 15:55, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article shortly. Ealdgyth - Talk 15:55, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   Some spots of jargon and some places where the meaning isn't clear

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Specific concerns

• Lead:
  • Jargon: "non-convective remnant" needs linking or expaining.
  • More jargon: "increasing wind shear" needs explaining to those not hurricane buffs
  • Any reason you've linked Dominican Republic but not Lesser Antilles and Puerto Rico?
  • I think something is missing in this sentence: "In Puerto Rico, up to 2.76 in (70 mm), causing street flooding and forcing the evacuation of three schools." up to 2.76 in what?
• Meteorological history:
  • "After slowly organizing for a few days, the NHC declared that the system had developed into a tropical depression, the second of the season, early on August 11 while located roughly 280 mi (455 km) west of the Cape Verde Islands." is very ... convoluted. Suggest breaking into two sentences.
  • I don't understand "Gradual intensification of the depression was anticipated as it tracked over marginally warm sea surface temperatures and into an area of low wind shear; however, dry air would limit the strengthening.", what exactly was the sequence? Was it expected to intensify, but didn't because of dry air? If so, you need to reword to make this clearer ..
  • "Shortly after, it was determined, in post-storm analysis, that Ana had degenerated into a tropical wave, no longer a tropical cyclone." convoluted wording suggest rewording.

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth - Talk 16:11, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

I think ive sorted evrey thing out.Jason Rees (talk) 08:20, 24 December 2009 (UTC)