Talk:Tricolored bat/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 19:03, 29 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I propose taking on this review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:03, 29 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

First reading

Basically the article seems well written and pretty comprehensive. A few points that struck me -

"French zoologist Frédéric Cuvier. Cuvier " - Best not to have two Cuviers consecutively.
- done
"the "perimyotine group". The perimyotine group was" - Again, this is a bit too repetitive.
- done
"It has blond fur " - As you are starting a new section, you need a name here.
- done
"They are seasonal breeders," - The same is true here. It is best as far as possible to either use singular or plural in discussing the bat, but not dodge back and forth.
- fixed
"Young do not reach sexual maturity in their first fall; they do not breed until they are a year old." - I think "a year old" is unhelpful, perhaps use "their second fall" or somesuch.
- revised phrasing
The "Behavior" section uses the word "roost" nine times.
- Was able to remove one instance, though not sure further simplification is possible as this is the accurate term for both the noun and the verb
"human structures" - Maybe "buildings"
- changed
In the "Diet and foraging" section, you have a mixture of singular and plural bats
- fixed
"Predators, parasites, and disease" section starts with "Its" and there is more singular/plural alternation
- fixed
"I wonder whether "Relationship to people" is a good section title?
- I'm trying to have internal consistency with other bat GAs I've written in terms of section titles and order. #Relationship to people is also found in Pteropus, Indian flying fox, big brown bat, and little brown bat. Do you have a suggestion for an alternative? I would just want to make sure I changed it in other articles as well.
Looking back at the lead now to see whether it summarises the main text well, I see it mentions the former name "eastern pipistrelle", but this is not mentioned elsewhere
- added to taxonomy section
The lead suffers from the singular/plural problem again.
- fixed
Wikilink Echolocation, roost, gestation, taxon and any other less well-known terms
- added

That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:02, 29 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for taking on the review, Cwmhiraeth. I should have time to get to this tomorrow! Enwebb (talk) 15:42, 30 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Looking at the citations, some of them need italics for species names, and #13 has a different date format from the other references. Give me a ping when you are ready for me to give the article another run through. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:44, 7 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- fixed. Ready for another readthrough, Cwmhiraeth. Enwebb (talk) 03:06, 8 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

GA criteria

The article is well written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
The article uses many reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research.
The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.
The article is neutral.
The article is stable.
The images are relevant and have suitable captions, and are properly licensed.

Final assessment - I believe this article reaches the GA criteria. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:52, 8 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]