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Remove the release sentence because the song did not have a separate release from the album Done
"It was written by" → "The song was written by" Done
"different pieces together" → "different pieces of music together" Done
There is too much info listed for the lead about what the style contains; probably cut out parts like pianos and synths but you can keep the influences Done
The themes are not properly sourced in the body; they should be mentioned in the comp section as well as or instead of reception Done
"The song's intro samples" → "The song samples" Done
Remove release years of the songs Done
"Reviewers praised the song's lyrics, its use of the Temptations sample" → "Contemporary reviewers praised the song's lyrics, its sampling of the Temptations" Done
"number 14 in New Zealand," should be changed to mention the New Zealand Hot Singles Chart because otherwise it is misleading what you are referring to Done
"of his album." does this refer to the other person's album or Healy's? If the former, then keep as is and if the latter, then change to "of Notes on a Conditional Form." Done
"and so they merged them" → "thus they merged them" Done
"and funk-influenced" → "and a funk-influenced" on the audio sample text Done
""Tonight (I Wish I Was Your Boy)" is a mid-tempo" → "The song is a mid-tempo" and this should be swapped with the following sentence because genres belong first Done
"Musically, it is an" → "Musically, "Tonight (I Wish I Was Your Boy)" is an" Done
The section should be ordered by thematic elements as accurately as possible, so best songs of 2020 rankings should be grouped together directly after the NME and PF weekly lists Done
"commending the mixture" → "with Troy Smith commending the mixture" Done
Attribute the Spin review to Brenton Blanchet Done
"calling it the" → "calling the track the" to avoid confusion Done
"was the best non-single" → "is the best non-single" Done
"are singing about."" → "are singing about"." per MOS:QUOTE Done
Attribute the highlighting from Insider to Callie Ahlgrim Done
"a standout from the album," → "a standout from Notes on a Conditional Form," Done
(CA)Giacobbe It is only cited once in the para so you can have it after the sentence in question, but this is about the YT ref isn't it because they've been reordered and the other one does not mention it beginning there? --K. Peake16:35, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Kyle Peake: I think there may be some confusion happening. To replace the Exespose ref, I had to replace it with 2 other sources, so I think it threw them out of order. Ref 47 (Rolling Stone) (which is cited directly after the sentence) mentions the teddy bear being depressed. The following ref (located at the end of the paragraph), 48, says: "a bear in his little bedroom that sings of an unnamed pain". Giacobbetalk16:50, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The quote about "situating the voice in the song that seemed to be stuck in a moment, thinking of another time and even another timeline" can be added, but maybe paraphrase to avoid potential copyvio issues Done
"said: "[the] teddy bear who, like" → "said that the teddy bear "like" because who is redundant here Done
"of his computer."" → "of his computer"." per MOS:QUOTE Done
Copyvio score looks too high at 46.8%; cut down the amount of lyrics quoting definitely to fix this, plus the Uproxx issue should be fixed if you edit that bear quote
@Kyle Peake: Down to 42. Only two small lines in the song are quoted (one from the sample and one from the song itself). Genius took Healy's quote from the Apple Music interview, making it appear higher than it actually is. Giacobbetalk17:14, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
I was considering this issue for ref 23 too, but WP:RSSM says reputable student media can be reliable sometimes and this is one of three fully independent student newspapers in the UK, plus has received numerous awards so I think it is a decent source
Remove target on Insider for ref 39 Done
Remove target on Rolling Stone Italy for ref 46 Done
On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but I have faith in you getting this one done today since it's only a few sections and you've already done most! --K. Peake15:44, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
(CA)Giacobbe This article looks very good for such a short time since my review comments; regarding the issue with archiving, I have encountered that before and it is acceptable as long as the majority of refs are archived; remember, GA standard is not as high as FA where something like this would have to be 100% completed. On the subject of the copyright level, the 42% is fine and this context and good job cutting down the lyrics! You have two more issues remaining though; remove the target on samples in the second para of the lead and remove the comma after sophomore album in the body. --K. Peake17:25, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Done
On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but I have faith in you getting this one done today since it's only a few sections and you've already done most! --K. Peake 15:44, 22 February 2021 (UTC)