Talk:This Dust Was Once the Man/GA1

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 18:37, 4 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

""This Dust Was Once the Man" is an elegy poem by Walt Whitman in 1871" - Missing a word?

Written

" "This Dust Was Once the Man" was included in Book XXII of Whitman's Leaves of Grass" - Yeah, it's cited in the lead, but Book XXII isn't mentioned in the body, just Leaves of Grass. To me, it seems better from a MOS/style standpoint to add the Book XXII detail to where the publishing in Leaves of Grass is mentioned in the body, and then remove the lead citation per WP:LEADCITE.

"Whitman first became interested in Abraham Lincoln in the beginning of the American Civil War" - Not sure that "in the beginning of the American Civil War" is the best phrasing here
"Whitman first became interested in Abraham Lincoln in the beginning of the American Civil War. He felt that Lincoln could be a great leader as early as 1860, and grew to admire him" - It's a bit nitpicky, but 1860 is before the beginning of the Civil War proper, so these don't quite fit together well. Maybe use a link like Secession crisis of 1860-61 instead of American Civil War, or mention the election, or something as an alternative

The long citation in the sources for Eiselein gives p. 396 as the applicable one, while p. 395 is cited in the references. Which page is the correct one?

Not relevant to the GA criteria, but I'm having trouble figuring out why this article is tagged for the Classical Music WikiProject.

That's it from me, I believe. Short, but a quality article. Hog Farm _Bacon 19:14, 4 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Hog Farm, the above addressed. w.r.t. short, Agreed, but I was suprised at being able to write a 1000 word article on a 32 word poem :P Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 19:41, 4 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]