Talk:The Winds of Winter (Game of Thrones)/GA1
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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 14:38, 19 August 2016 (UTC)
- Grabbing this for a review later. Miyagawa (talk) 14:38, 19 August 2016 (UTC)
- Lead: Name the reviewer in "with one critic calling it "very surprising and satisfying."
- "cause the crew" either "because" or "as"
- Add something to the infobox image's caption about the digital compositing of multiple ships - as you've discussed this in the article and the lead, that'll then be good for fair use purposes
- Plot:Missing a full stop at the end of "celebrates the recapture of Riverrun with the Lannisters" - also I'd just merge this subsection into a single paragraph since the first paragraph is just that single line.
- "aren't" to "are not" - we don't use contractions (except in quotes), although this often catches me out as well
- "to take care of her son, Jon Snow." - I'd say "her son, which is revealed to be Jon Snow" since she never specifically says who the child is (although there are plenty of guesswork on the web about the original Targaryen name), but the fade from the child's face to Snow's makes it implicit.
- Production: Link Rhaegar Targaryen
- "upcoming series" - I'd clarify that as "upcoming television series"
- Reception: WhatCulture is one word, and I wouldn't put it in italics. Needs to be fixed in the cite too
- References: Cite #32 needs an access date
- Cite #45: TV.com shouldn't be in italics
That's everything. Nice job! Placing it on hold for the time being. Miyagawa (talk) 08:17, 20 August 2016 (UTC)
- @Miyagawa: I did it. All done AffeL (talk) 19:25, 20 August 2016 (UTC)
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