Talk:The Roof (Back in Time)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 20:17, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

• a dab link
• What is the name of the song, "The Roof" or "The Roof (Back in Time)"? Adabow (talk · contribs) 20:49, 28 November 2010 (UTC)
  • Its officially "The Roof (Back in Time)" but is usually shortened to "The Roof" :)--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 22:10, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Composition

• Link contemporary R&B (lower case 'c', too)
• Eb ♭ major should be 'E{{music|flat}} major' and link to E-flat major
• A♭-F♭-1 - no dash between F♭ and 1
• "spans from the note of Eb♭3" → "spans from the low note of E♭3"
• Link piano and guitar
• "Aside from assisting with its writing and chord progression" - wouldn't chord progression be part of writing
• Nickson's quote should have spaced en dashes instead of unspaced hyphens
• There is no mention of the sample of "Shook Ones part II", which you note in the lead

Critical reception

• Slant Magazine should not be in italics as it is online-only
• MOS:QUOTE - quotes in quotes should have inverted commas - ie 'The Shook Ones', not "The Shook Ones". The same with 'liberated' with 'Moet'

Commercial reception

• 'top-100' should be 'top 100'
• "In The Netherlands, it performed weakly as well, peaking at number sixty-three while spending five weeks fluctuating in the charts" → In the Netherlands, it performed weakly as well, peaking at number sixty-three while spending five weeks fluctuating in the Dutch Singles Chart.

• The Dutch Chart ref does not actually verify anything about the song. Can I suggest [1] instead? Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:16, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Music video

• File:Mariah-carey-the-roof.jpg should be shrunk, and needs a link to the video
• As above, Slant Magazine not in italics
• Caption of screenshot should be 'The video showing a wet Carey in the back of the limousine' (no full stop)

Live performances

• The lead and this section give different ideas. The Japanese performances aren't in here, and the lead gives the impression that the song was performed on all tour legs

Formats and track listings

• Source?
• A 12" single is mentioned in the infobox, but makes not appearance here.

Credits and personnel

• Are these in any particular order? If not, they should go alphabetically.
  • Thats the order it shows in the album's liner notes. The last 2 are only credited because of the samples.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 22:06, 28 November 2010 (UTC)
    • OK, that's fine. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:09, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Further reading

• 'Further reading' is for books that aren't cited in the text. Rename this 'Bibliography' or something

I'll put the review on hold now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 20:48, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Just realised something else: the release dates in the lead and the infobox are different. It would be good if you could place the release date in the body, too, and reference it. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:18, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Nice work! Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:30, 28 November 2010 (UTC)