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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 10:42, 23 November 2022 (UTC)
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I will crack on with this right away! --K. Peake 10:42, 23 November 2022 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Remove R&B from the infobox since the body only cites that as an influence
- Mention that it was recorded by the group for their eponymous debut studio album (1965)
- "by the band's trip to" → "by their trip to"
- "recording by the band" → "recording by Tages"
- "on 15 August," → "on 15 August 1995" and instead mention which number it was out of the album's chronology, sourcing this in the body
- Mention the hard rock genre in prose
- "reaching the top-ten" → "reaching the top-10" per MOS:NUM
- Instead change the appeared sentence to mentioning it has since appeared on multiple compilations since the debut album will be mentioned in the opening sentence
- "one of the group's best singles, with many critics noting the hard rock style" → "one of Tages' best singles, with many critics noting the musical style"
Background
[edit]- Img looks good!
- Pipe Kvällstoppen to Sverigetopplistan
- "electric guitar during the guitar solos." → "electric guitar during the solos." with the wikilink
- "which took a toll at the members" → "taking a toll on the member's"
- "Tages record label Platina" → "Tages' record label Platina"
- "which showcased the group members" → "which showcased the members'"
- "band of the summer."" → "band of the summer"." per MOS:QUOTE
- "Towards the end of July," → "Towards the end of July 1965,"
- "which allowed for the band to" → "allowing for them to"
Composition and recording
[edit]- "the band had received," → "Tages had received,"
- "in the end "something undeniably original."" → "in the end was "something undeniably original"." per MOS:QUOTE
- Pipe key to Key (music)
- Remove the comma before "I Should Be Glad" and the year per it already having been introduced
- Pipe choruses to Refrain
- "also alludes to" → "also allude to"
- "from their previous material."" → "from their previous material"."
- Quote box looks good!
- Remove overly obvious wikilink on Stockholm
- "Henriksson was allegedly" → "He was allegedly"
- "he stated that" → "the producer stated that"
- "watch on them [Tages]."" → "watch on them [Tages]"."
Release and commercial performance
[edit]- "by Thuresson and the band." → "by Thuresson and them."
- "the interested of band to continue" → "the interest of Tages to continue"
- "only 2000 copies" → "only 2,000 copies"
- "it would get re-issued" → "the song was eventually re-issued"
- "position of 15." → "position of number 15."
- "on 14 September" → "on 14 September 1965"
- "something their fans were" → "something the fanbase were"
- "were included on the group's debut album Tages" → "were included on Tages' eponymous debut album"
- Between "Dimples" and "Naggin'" is not fully sourced
- "in August 1967," → "in August 1967."
- "of the group's compilation album" → "of Tages' compilation album" with the wikilink
Reception and legacy
[edit]- Img looks good!
- "received primarily positive reviews." → "was met with primarily positive reviews from critics."
- "a hit for the band." → "a hit for Tages."
- "the song is described as" → "the staff describe the song as"
- Remove wikilink on Anders Töpel
- Remove the release year of "Don't Turn Your Back" since this has been mentioned previously
- "Aftonbladet states that" → "A reviewer for Aftonbladet states that"
- "stating that the song might be" → "declaring the song may be"
- "which the band also took" → "which Tages also took"
- "Berry states that "The One for You" was" → "Berry writes "The One for You" was"
- ""The One for You" is an" → ""The One for You" was an"
- "mod rocker on par" → "mod rocke[r] on par"
- "while also stating that it" → "while he also stated that it"
Personnel
[edit]- Use
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so there is the right space between credits and personnel
Charts
[edit]- Pipe Kvällstoppen to Sverigetopplistan
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks phenomenal at 9.9%!!!
- Like the above, this is great!
Sources
[edit]- Pipe Now & Then to Now & Then Books
Final comments and verdict
[edit]- On hold until all of the issues are fixed; nice effort from you again! --K. Peake 09:48, 24 November 2022 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake. Thank you! Apologies in the delay of fixing the article as I never received a notification. I decided not to include two of your points; "Mention that it was recorded by the group for their eponymous debut studio album" and "Pipe Now & Then to Now & Then Books". The single was never recorded specifically for the album, but was rather included on it when the album was released almost three months later.
- The wikilink you wanted me to add, Now & Then Books revolves around a Canadian book shop; Now & Then was a Swedish musical magazine unaffiliated to that store. --VirreFriberg 22:13, 8 December 2022 (GMT+1) VirreFriberg (talk) 21:14, 8 December 2022 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, did some copy editing for you but thanks for your patience and honesty! --K. Peake 22:07, 8 December 2022 (UTC)