Talk:The Human Centipede (First Sequence)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: –MuZemike 03:19, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lead issues

The Human Centipede received mixed reviews, but several accolades at various international film festivals. - I think there is a typo there, but I'm not sure how to correct it myself. Done Coolug (talk) 17:13, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
~~I recommend that the lead be two full paragraphs of prose; that is, merge what you have now into two paragraphs and then expand them just a little.~~ Done Coolug (talk) 17:13, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Prose issues

From the "Production" section downward, the paragraphing is quite choppy and short. Especially in the "Writing" subsection and in the "Reception" section, many of those paragraphs can be combined into longer, fuller paragraphs. Always try to aim for paragraphs that are somewhere between 4-9 sentences in length. Done Coolug (talk) 17:29, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Image issue

~~Per WP:CAPTION, File:10.1.10HumanCentipedeByLuigiNovi.jpg should not end with end-punctuation as it is not a complete sentence.~~ Done Coolug (talk) 16:24, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Verifiability issues

There are some URL problems, after looking at CheckLinks:

~~Ref #47 [1] is not accessible.~~ Done Coolug (talk) 15:59, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
~~Ref #21 [2] is not accessible; it goes back to the main leedsfilm.com page.~~ Done Coolug (talk) 16:08, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
~~Ref #29 [3] is the same as #21, where the URL truncates.~~ I've removed the claim this link backed up entirely as it wasn't verifiable. Done Coolug (talk) 16:11, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
~~Ref #27 [4], albeit saying it's a deadlink, does not point to the article in question.~~ Done Coolug (talk) 16:19, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

There are also other portions of content which are not in the citations given (in which I have tagged with {{failed verification}} in the article):

Ref #2 ([5], Dieter Laser as Dr. Heiter,... in the TV series Lexx,) → The facts that Heiter is retired or that casting for his role took place in Berlin with Six's intent to cast Laser are not in the citation given. Done Coolug (talk) 15:20, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Ref #3 ([6], Casting for the roles of Jenny and Lindsay took place in New York City) → Nowhere in that source says about the casting that took place in New York City. However, I think you need to switch that reference out, as it does say [7] how auditioning in NYC. Done Coolug (talk) 15:31, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Ref #28 ([8], The film was distributed by Bounty Films, a company who in the past have only distributed gay-themed films) → The source doesn't say that the film was distributed by Bounty Films, nor does it mention its relation to producing only gay-themed films. There doesn't seem to be a source that Bounty only previously released gay themed films, so I've got rid of that statement. Found another source for the fact that Bounty distributed in the UK. Done Coolug (talk) 15:47, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Also, a minor nitpick on the YouTube reference (#11, [9]), it's normally better to have a link from the website itself, more specifically http://www.screenjabber.com/node/1816 which provides more information behind the interview and makes the source a bit more reliable. Also, you might want to update the U.S. DVD sales, which is now about $1.8 million. Done Coolug (talk) 15:54, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Conclusions

In progress - I have only completed the prose so far; I will get to verifiability sometime tomorrow. The prose itself (aside from the paragraphing issue) is fairly good, and it is broad in scope. –MuZemike 03:19, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

On hold – Overall, there are a few verifiability issues that need to be addressed as well as that the prose needs to be tightened up a little. Hence, I'll place on hold pending improvements to the issues listed above. Normally, I give about 7 days or so for those improvements to occur. –MuZemike 04:50, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for such a thorough and constructive review. I shall go about making these changes to the prose and fixing the references as soon as possible. Cya Coolug (talk) 13:25, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I've made all of your suggested changes and hope I have made the changes to the standard you would expect from a GA article. If there is anything I haven't done sufficiently or haven't done properly please let me know so I can sort them out. Thanks. Coolug (talk) 17:32, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

All the improvements look very good.

Passed. Nice work. –MuZemike 23:41, 29 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Hooray! Coolug (talk) 11:10, 30 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]