Talk:The Hounds of Baskerville/GA1

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 02:38, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

~~Lede: Link 'second series'~~
~~Lede: "who also portrays Mycroft Holmes in the series, Sherlock's brother," -> "who also portrays Mycroft Holmes, Sherlock's brother in the series."~~
~~Lede: "Gatiss felt a greater… than he does" Make sure the tenses match; I'd use past~~
~~Lede: "The episodes provided an example of how the series is not afraid to tackle the most famous stories" Add 'even' before 'most'~~
Lede: "After its broadcast on BBC One, the episode was given consolidated figures of 10.266 million viewers in the United Kingdom, although a slight drop from the previous episode, was still the second largest audiences in British television the week it aired." Break into two -> "After its broadcast on BBC One, the episode was given consolidated figures of 10.266 million viewers in the United Kingdom. This rating, although a slight drop from the previous episode, was still the second largest audiences in British television the week it aired."
Plot: "Sherlock reacts with anger, denying that there can be anything wrong with him" -> Do you mean to say: "Sherlock reacts with anger, denying that there cannot be anything wrong with him"

~~Doesn't that imply that he admits that there is something wrong with him? Because he claimed nothing was wrong with him. -- Matthew RD 21:36, 14 May 2012 (UTC)~~[reply]

Oh yeah, oops. I didn't catch the 'deny' part.--Gen. Quon (talk) 23:24, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

~~Plot: Why is there a minefield in this city? :P~~

Baskerville is a research base, in the middle of Dartmoor, which is a National Park, no cities around. Clarified a little. -- Matthew RD 21:36, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

~~Casting: "In June 2011 it was announced that Russell Tovey will appear on Sherlock series two in its second episode." Change 'will' to 'would'~~
~~Casting: "said of the experience;" I believe the semi-colon should just be a colon~~
~~Writing: "as it was written after Doyle killed off the character and as a result was well sold." Which character was killed off?~~
~~Writing: "Gatiss observes that Conan Doyle's tiredness of the character…" change present to past, i.e. observed~~
Writing: "The three series two episode, respectively centres on Sherlock deal with love, fear, and death" -> "The other episodes of series two, respectively centre on Sherlock dealing with love, fear, and death"

There were only three episodes, what you want seems to imply there was four? Reworded for clarity. -- Matthew RD 21:36, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good now.--Gen. Quon (talk) 23:31, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Writing: "Freeman stated that when he sees the hound, Sherlock becomes "really terrified" and for some time stops trusting the evidence he sees" -> "Freeman stated that when Sherlock saw the hound, he became "really terrified" and, for some time, stopped trusting the evidence he saw"
Writing: "The episode is an example of how the series is not afraid to tackle the most famous stories" Add 'even' in there and move it up to the part where you're taking about the actual novel and how famous it is

Done? Did I move it in the right place? -- Matthew RD 21:36, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, I think it looks good.--Gen. Quon (talk) 23:31, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

~~Plot/Reception: I would move the picture for the plot down into the reception area~~
~~Critical Reception: "He praises the two lead actors…" -> "He praised the two lead actors"~~
~~Critical Reception: "favorably compares" -> "favorably compared"~~
~~Critical Reception: "Chris Tilly of IGN rated the episode a "good" 7 out of 10, stating" -> "Chris Tilly of IGN rated the episode a "good" 7 out of 10, but stated"~~
References: No. 4 (TV Tropes) is not a reliable reference

May I ask why it's unreliable? -- Matthew RD 21:36, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The big reason is that its a wiki and thus editable by anyone. Because of this, it doesn't have editorial oversight like a reliable source should.--Gen. Quon (talk) 23:25, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Did not see that, but now I do. Done. Hopefully the replacement sources I could find a feasable. -- Matthew RD 00:12, 15 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 15:37, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Great response! Just sort out the TV Tropes issue and I'll pass it!--Gen. Quon (talk) 23:31, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I feel comfortable with this now. Passing GA; great work! :)--Gen. Quon (talk) 01:44, 15 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]