Talk:The First Day of the Rest of Your Life (The Walking Dead)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Soaper1234 (talk · contribs) 14:34, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello. I'm going to review this article. I shall give comments in the coming days. Soaper1234 - talk 14:34, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

The callback mentioned in the caption is not mentioned, and therefore sourced, anywhere else in the article. It should either be removed or mentioned and sourced.
All characters should have full names on first mention.
Add a comma after captivity.
"in order to kill Negan (Jeffrey Dean Morgan) reanimated" does not makes sense to me.
All Out War arc is not explained anywhere, but I've looked around and believe it is the stories of the next season. If this is right, I would change "Further storylines include the start of the build-up to the All Out War arc" → "The episode also includes the build-up to the following season's storylines".
Remove "Sonequa" and "as Sasha Williams" from third paragraph; already mentioned.
"This episode was ~~also~~ dedicated"
Add the in-memory information to production and move the source there.

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Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 17:47, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Plot

All characters should have full names on first mention.
The plot lacks context, so the average reader who has not seen the show may find it hard to follow. You need to provide context about the characters and the locations on first mention (e.g., who is Dwight?, what are Saviors?, who are Abraham and Maggie?, what is a walker?).
Carl needs an actor and wikilinking.
Comma needed after losses.
"note from Dwight that he was" → "note from Dwight, explaining that he was"

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Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 17:47, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Production

First paragraph has no sources.
Add "Writer" before Scott M. Gimple
"on Talking Dead → "on aftershow Talking Dead"
Add a reference after "weeks before"."
"Although Tyreese is not mentioned" → "Although Sasha's brother, Tyreese, is not mentioned"

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Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 17:47, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Now that Scott M. Gimple has been removed from the prose, he needs mentioning for the quote. Change "She said that "Scott did tell me is that it would be heroic and sacrificial..." → "She said that writer Scott M. Gimple had told her Sasha's death would be "heroic and sacrificial...""

Reception

"an unforgettable sendoff Sunday night" → "an unforgettable sendoff ~~Sunday night~~"

Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 17:47, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

References

Reference #10 is a dead link.
References #16 and #17 need |url-access=limited

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Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 17:47, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Notes

@Soaper1234: All of your suggestions have been addressed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 17:47, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Some Dude From North Carolina: Just one more from me then we're done! Soaper1234 - talk 18:22, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Soaper1234: done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 18:27, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Some Dude From North Carolina: Happy to pass this then. Well done! Soaper1234 - talk 20:44, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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