Talk:The Arsenal of Freedom/GA1
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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 21:02, 13 May 2013 (UTC)
- Sentence "Critics praised the appearance of Vincent Schiavelli, but otherwise was a mixed response." -- Sentence needs to be reworked.
- Reworded to "The opinions of critics were mixed, but singled out the appearance of Vincent Schiavelli for praise." Miyagawa (talk) 18:34, 14 May 2013 (UTC)
- "The field prevents the Enterprise from beaming up the away-team. " -- Might want to clarify a little, the last graph says only Riker was affected by the beam.
- Clarified - it was a different field. Miyagawa (talk) 18:34, 14 May 2013 (UTC)
- "Story editor Maurice Hurley saw the plot of "The Arsenal of Freedom" as commentary on the sale of American Grumman F-14 Tomcats to Iran taken to the "ultimate conclusion"." -- A few things here: one, you might want to be more specific about the incident, or explain what current event inspired it. Two, I was under the impression that there wasn't a lot of allegory in the Next Generation, unlike the Original Series. Was this a normal to have a 'moral' to the story? Three, explain the analogy a little more.
- I've added some background. The TNG morals only appear probably in about 5% of the episodes. There's more morals in a season of DS9 or TOS than in the entire TNG run! I'm not 100% sure of what Hurley was trying to say, but I think he was saying that the country went bankrupt because no one bought the technology. Miyagawa (talk) 18:34, 14 May 2013 (UTC)
- "The story originally had Picard dying" -- Had they really wanted to kill off Stewart's character or was he going to come back to life at the end of the episode. As worded it sounds like Stewart was supposed to leave the show.
- Reworded to say that Picard was injured - rather than they intended to kill him off! :) Miyagawa (talk) 18:34, 14 May 2013 (UTC)
- One disambiguation link.
- Fixed - I must get around to creating an article at Maurice Hurley (screenwriter) at some point. Miyagawa (talk) 18:34, 14 May 2013 (UTC)
- No duplicate links. All external links are working. No images so there are no problems with licensing, and there are no problems with article stability and neutrality.
- Placing the article on hold for fixes. —Ed!(talk) 00:10, 14 May 2013 (UTC)
Good work, passing the GA. —Ed!(talk) 01:46, 15 May 2013 (UTC)