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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:03, 16 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This will be over with today! --K. Peake 09:03, 16 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Columbia Studio A, Nashville → Columbia A, Nashville in the infobox
  • Remove the blues genre from the opening sentence and place the side three of double album part here, placing the release year in brackets instead and removing the track position
  • Why is the studio named as Columbia Music Row Studios here when elsewhere says otherwise and piped to the article for Columbia Studio B?
  • I had missed this. I think that older sources tend to state "Music Row Studios". Lots of the Blonde on Blonde articles previously links to Quonset Hut Studio. However, as Sanders (2020) wrote, "Johnston... block booked Studio A... Studio A was the secondary studio at Columbia's Nashville facility; Studio B was the in-demand room, the iconic Qunoset Hut" (p.99) BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:48, 16 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The song incorporated elements" → "The song is a blues number that incorporates elements"
  • "at being kept wating" → "at being kept waiting"
  • "involved with; she is" → "involved with, who is" to be less repetitive with the body
  • "for both lyrics and musicianship." → "for its lyrics and musicianship." to be less wordy
  • "A different take was" → "A different take was included on"

Background and recording

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  • "with a chorus" are you sure the plural shouldn't be used instead since this is about two recordings?
  • Shouldn't it be mentioned that the finishing lines are also used throughout?
  • "on June 20, 1966.[11][12][a], as" → "on June 20, 1966,[11][12][a] as"
  • "The song is described as a" → ""Temporary Like Achilles" is described as a"
  • Wikilink blues and add an appropriate term after the quote, like song or number
  • "who is now with" → "that is now with"
  • Wikilink as minor chords per WP:PIPE
  • "and "Most Likely You Go Your Way and I'll Go Mine" from the same album" → "and "Most Likely You Go Your Way and I'll Go Mine", also from Blonde on Blonde," and remove the first comma
  • Wikilink Tin Pan Alley
  • "that it was the only track" → "that it was also the only track"

Lyrical interpretation

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  • "and "Leans against" → "and "Lean[s] against" per the source
  • "also believes that the classical poetry influenced Dylan" this does not work grammatically after the school part; I am confused what you are even trying to say here
  • "Dylan mentioned The Odyssey," → "Dylan mentioned the Odyssey," with the wikilink
  • Add a space before Geoff Ward

Critical reception

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  • Mentioning the album's critical reception here is irrelevant; either replace with the song's for the first sentence or just remove this altogether if you can't summarize
  • "of the album that "One" → "of the album, "One"
  • "not very special"." → "not very special."" per MOS:QUOTE
  • Second para looks good!

Personnel

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  • Good

Notes

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  • Good

References

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Works cited

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  • Cite Billboard Books as work/website instead

Further reading

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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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  • I don't think that this is possible within the limits of the cite book template, K. Peake. I checked that Billboard Books, rather than Watson-Guptill or any other entity, is listed as the publisher in sources like WorldCat and the British Library catalogue. Trying to format manually gives an error message: "Italic or bold markup not allowed in: publisher=". Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:08, 17 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]