Talk:Taylor Ward/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:30, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: Sewageboy (talk · contribs) 20:19, 21 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:34, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie, @Sewageboy, not sure which one of you this is waiting on, so here's a reminder ping for you both. -- asilvering (talk) 16:24, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Asilvering Nominator has not edited since October 23. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 18:53, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the delay. Doing the revisions now Sewageboy (talk) 21:33, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie Ok, revisions have been implemented. Let me know if there are any other questions or concerns. Thank you for reviewing. Sewageboy (talk) 22:21, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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A typical round of copy changes. One slightly larger task is finishing the narrative for Ward through the end of the 2024 season, but you figured that might happen. This should be easy. Ping when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:50, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

Copy changes

College career

Ward enrolled at California State University, Fresno to play college baseball This unbalanced comma situation, like a GEOCOMMA or a DATECOMMA, requires a comma after Fresno.
- Fixed Sewageboy (talk) 22:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
ranking second on the team in each category behind the elder Luplow The way this was phrased made me think there was a second Luplow on the team.
- Removed "elder" to prevent confusion Sewageboy (talk) 22:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Following the season, he was given a tryout for the United States collegiate national baseball team on May 28 and he made the 24-man roster on June 30. WP:CINS: comma needed after "May 28", replace "and" with a semicolon, or (recommended) remove "he" after "and".
- Fixed Sewageboy (talk) 22:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Professional career

Ward made his professional debut with the Rookie Advanced-level Orem Owlz of the Pioneer League, going 0-for-4 against the Ogden Raptors in his first game on August 18, 2015. He recorded his first professional hit on August 23, a single off Grand Junction Rockies pitcher Chad Zurat. Ward was selected as a Pioneer League All-Star, scoring a run during the exhibition on August 4 This makes no chronological sense. Why is the exhibition before his debut?
- Fixed an error there -- it appears I accidentally wrote the first couple dates as August 18 and August 23 when I meant to write June. Sewageboy (talk) 22:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
He returned to Mobile to start the year, where he made his professional debut at third base on April 5. Dangling modifier. Try He started the year by returning to Mobile, where he made his professional debut at third base on April 5.
- Good call. Fixed. Sewageboy (talk) 22:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
His .281 batting average and .360 OBP was the highest among qualified Angels batters and his 3.7 Wins Above Replacement (WAR) was third-most on the team. CINS add comma after "batters"
- Fixed Sewageboy (talk) 22:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Complete narrative for the 2024 season. (I imagine this is mostly because of the delay in review and a lack of updates since.)
- Added new content to wrap up the 2024 season subsection, including trade speculation and final stats. Sewageboy (talk) 22:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Player profile

The length of the swing system quote—merited here because of the complexity of how to phrase it, in my opinion—demands in-text attribution for its source.
- Added attribution to the article author. Sewageboy (talk) 22:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sourcing and spot checks

7: The Baseball Cube batting statistics for the 2013 Bucs. Data checks out for Ward. Y
20: Box score for the AFL All-Star Game, with Ward participating. Y
22: MiLB.com staff article naming Ward an organization All-Star. Y
38: Details on the August 13, 2018, walkoff. (Note: Angels PR is pretty much ABOUTSELF for a banal fact confirmable by more statistics digging.) Suggestion: Add a citation to the box score as the tweet alone doesn't cover the opponent or final score. Y
- Added box score citation. Sewageboy (talk) 22:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
47: Taylor Ward played the role of hero with a two-out, two-run double in the eighth inning off closer Clay Holmes to secure an unlikely comeback in front of a crowd with almost enough Yankees fans to create a road atmosphere. Y

Images

Two own-work photos from his time with the Angels, both appropriately licensed, and a third CC-licensed image from Flickr. Encouragement: Add alt text for users with screen readers, though it might be as simple as "Taylor Ward holding the bat in an Angels uniform" or something.

Added alt text to all three images. Sewageboy (talk) 22:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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