Talk:Tales of Vesperia/GA1

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Reviewer: PresN (talk · contribs) 21:42, 20 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing... --Pres N 21:42, 20 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"but has yet to receive a localization" -> "but has yet to receive an English localization"
"walking or running along a fixed axis, freely running around the battlefield, jump in any direction, guard against attacks, and pause the battle to select a different enemy to attack" - tense shift halfway form verb-ing to verb
In the lead, you have blastia as capitalized, but lowercase in Setting
"Vesperia was initially planned as a title for the PlayStation 2. In response, the executives at Namco Bandai said" - "in response"? Like, the Vesperia team announced that it was for the PS2, and in response to that announcement Bandai said no it wasn't?
You should mention when Symphonia and Abyss were released ("during the later development stages of Tales of the Abyss (2005).", "same group that developed Tales of Symphonia (2003)"
"Arrangements of "Ring a Bell" are used in some tracks in the main soundtrack, but the song itself is not included" - in the main soundtrack album, you mean?
"It was announced for a 2008 overseas release in February 2008, along with its release on the Xbox 360" - at this point you've only talked about the X360 release, so how is the English X360 release "along with" the X360 release?
"Alongside the standard release, the game was packaged with an Xbox 360 Premium Edition that launched alongside the standard edition" - double alongside the standard release
"Speaking on why the port was being developed, a developer who worked on Vampire Rain, said" - no comma after Rain; maybe just "Speaking on why the port was being developed, a developer for Vampire Rain"
"first developed for the Xbox 360 [...], then porting to PS3" - tense
"As pat of his review,"
"120,176 units" - too details; round to the nearest thousand for these
"26 August launch [...] May 28, 2010." - you do month-day everywhere in the text besides that August one, but do day-month in the references. They don't need to be consistent with each other (though it's odd), but they should be consistent within the article/references.
"five manga adaptations: one anthology, one traditional adaptations" - adaptations, and also, anthology of what? Anthology is just a collection
"A voiced novel adaptation [...], began release" - began? So is it an episodic novel?
Ref 74 - "Retrieved August 16, 2014." - double check that you're consistent with date types.
Pretty darn good, overall! Placing on hold. --Pres N 22:28, 20 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@PresN: I've addressed all the cited concerns, I think. Forgot how difficult Tales articles could be at GA, but at least this one was released overseas. I've got a Japan-exclusive one to deal with next! --ProtoDrake (talk) 22:45, 20 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, passed! --Pres N 14:04, 21 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]