Talk:Sunday Morning (No Doubt song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 04:05, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there! I'm Cartoon network freak and here's my review to your GAN:

Lead

recorded by the American -> recorded by American

Done

available as -> available as a

Done

cassette single, and -> cassette single and

It's a serial comma–commonly used in American English

1997 by -> 1997 through

Done

the breakup -> their breakup

Done

The song was written -> you've already used "song"

Done

with one calling -> with one of them calling

Done

peaking in the -> peaking within the

Done

certified gold -> certified Gold

Gold does not need to be capitalized

Background and recording

Young, and musician -> Young and musician

Serial comma

Who is Angle

Gary Angle proceeds the sentence

officials, and had -> officials and had

Serial comma

band, and -> band and

Serial comma

when he did -> when he did so

Done

more and more songs -> several songs

Done

then his girlfriend -> his then-girlfriend

Composition

Flawless

Critical reception

Bleach from his -> Bleach, writing for
blog also enjoyed -> blog, also enjoyed
single... From -> single. [...] From

Commercial performance

successful, charting -> successful, with it charting
US -> United States
Try to not use "song" every time
certified gold -> certified Gold

Like I said, this would be incorrect

at positions -> at number
well, peaking -> well, with it peaking
the UK -> the United Kingdom
and number -> and at number

Music video

The song's music video -> An accompanying music video for the song
Remove "sometime"
band, after -> band, following
video opens -> video commences
ex-lover (Terry Hall) walks -> ex-lover, Terry Hall, walks

Terry Halls plays the lover, he isn't the actual lover though. Carbrera (talk) 16:40, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

with the ex-lover -> with Hall

Same as above. Carbrera (talk) 16:40, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel

Credits and personnel adapted from the Tragic Kingdom liner notes. -> Credits adapted from the liner notes of Tragic Kingdom
cover art -> photography

Release history

Unlink formats and label

Outcome: On hold for 7 days. Best of luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 04:48, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: I have changed the article accordingly; thanks a ton! Carbrera (talk) 16:40, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: Passing article. Congratulations! Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:33, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.