Talk:Stateville Penitentiary Malaria Study

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Hi, I found your article well written and very interesting. I thought you had done your research well and it showed in your article. I think it would be very helpful if you discussed the basis for how the prison functioned in the historical context, with Jeremy Bentham and touched a bit more on the autocracy of the prison. Good job overall! Ssimko1 (talk) 05:30, 27 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Ssimko1! I agree that the social roles defined by the prison are an important part of understanding Stateville. Currently, both Bentham's philosophies and the historical context are discussed in detail in the Stateville Correctional Center article. In my research, I didn't find many sources relating these concepts to the malaria experiments beyond a metaphorical comparison (like the analogies drawn in Dr. Comfort's article) and I'm not sure that type of connection is appropriate for a factual article. That said, I'll do some more research and see if I can work it into the article! Henryschuh (talk) 16:50, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Henryschuh. This article is very well organized; I thought the structure made it easy to read. I especially liked the historical context section and how it conveyed the urgency for malaria research at the time. I think the article could use more hyperlinks throughout, particularly on important terms such as quinine, World War II, etc. Another small critique that I have is on the formatting in the Legacy of Study section. The subheadings "Nuremberg medical trial" and "Effect on prisoner experimentation" should be the same font size as the previous subheadings in order to have consistent formatting. Great job on the article! Kennyling96 (talk) 20:42, 3 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Henry. I like the way you broke up the previous sections to make it more readable. Well written overall. I agree with the above - if you have time you could add some hyperlinks, though it's not too important. I'd suggest to try to vary your sentence structure a little bit. For example, the beginning of the section "Prison as a Research Center" starts with 3 simple sentences. Otherwise, I think what you have is pretty good.Dsun15 (talk) 17:27, 4 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Henry, nice job with this article. I like who you looked at it very historically, setting up the context and contingency of the study. It makes it really easy to place the study in its time period and look at it analytically. I would say that maybe you should include a bit of the actual results of the experiment - although the experimentally was wrong morally, were their benefits, and if so what were they? Overall though great job. Sarfrazzle (talk) 00:03, 5 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I appreciate the comments! I've added links to some more of the key terms and reformatted the section headings properly. Sarfrazzle, I agree that info on results of the experiments would be useful to add. In my research on this topic, I haven't found any substantiated claims that results of the experiments directly led to new malaria treatments being used, or that any significant changes to malaria treatment are linked back to these experiments. I have found the many journal articles published by the researchers, but don't know of any broader impact. Perhaps someone with a scientific background on malaria treatments could contribute this to the article. Henryschuh (talk) 02:07, 5 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

HI Henry, I along with most of the other reviewers, am very impressed with the articulation of this article. I found it to be just as informational as it was interesting. The subsections allowed for a greater understanding of the topic at hand especially when it comes to placing it in a certain place and time. If I were to offer a single suggestion, it would be to expand on the Stateville Penitentiary's effect on ethical research as I am sure there is a lot to be discussed(talk)

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